I would say unless the dates are pertinent to the story line you should ditch them. Also the last sentence at the end of the quote it should be a period not a comma because you use a narration line not a tag line. The sentence I heard the man groan is complete so the end of the quote would be a period. If you wrote"... a minute," said the old man, the it would be a comma because you don't know what the old man said without the quote. Does that make sense?jaybird wrote:A loofah sounds like a critter in Oz.Shann wrote:That sounds cool Cynthia. I always thought loofahs were a type of sponge that grew in the ocean or something. I wonder if they would grow around here. I need to start planting my garden too. It's been such a weird year first unseasonable warm then a freak snowstorm plus we have had a couple of frosts this month. I do have my tomatoes planted but need to get going on the rest
Yes, I'm still here, folks! I was in here reading.
3 days 'til my sis's wedding! Got my tux - pink shirt, cool!
I'm deleting all exclamation points and semi-colons in my YA novel. Should I get rid of dates like this:
It appeared to be an ordinary June day as I sat on in the front porch, engrossed in a western novel, until a thundering noise made me jerk up. A full-sized pickup truck pulling a trailer screeched to a halt across the street. A big man stepped out and stretched. When a boy about my age jumped out of the truck my heart began to race. Oh, to have a friend right across the street, I thought with excitement.
“Dad, we’re home!” the boy hollered. He gestured for his dad. “Hurry up, Dad. I can’t wait to see my room.”
“Oh, give your old man a minute,” I heard the man groan.
Becky it's too bad you can't come to work at camp. They really need people. Lyd is nervous she is going to pull double duty and work as a counselor and lifeguard. It wouldn't be bad for the little kid camp but would be hard for the senior high camp. Some of the campers would be kids she has gone to camp with for the last 10 years. It would be hard to be an authority figure for them.
Amy and I need to stop txting cuz she gave me her stomach bug. Now I have to do what my g-ma used to say, "The backdoor trot." TMI I know but how else would you totally appreciate me saying Thank you God for indoor plumbing. Okay gotta run!