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- Tue Jul 11, 2017 8:43 pm
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
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Re: First word that comes to mind.
- Sun Jul 09, 2017 4:59 pm
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
- Views: 9024558
- Wed Jul 05, 2017 11:17 pm
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
- Views: 9024558
Re: First word that comes to mind.
handballRedBaron wrote:
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- Wed Jul 05, 2017 10:20 am
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
- Views: 9024558
Re: First word that comes to mind.
sharpieShann wrote:Marker
- Tue Jul 04, 2017 8:25 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--CHARACTERIZATION
- Replies: 28
- Views: 54230
Re: Be a Better Writer--CHARACTERIZATION
Absolutely correct (by the way, this was a mostly true story; I was June, and the baby was my little brother).
- Tue Jul 04, 2017 8:22 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
- Replies: 40
- Views: 68215
Re: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
I like your revision very much--I think you're definitely on to something. Once the challenge starts up again, I strongly encourage you to read the top entries in Level 4 each week for more examples of strong writing. By the way, I remember this piece--I believe I was judging that week, and I rememb...
- Tue Jul 04, 2017 8:18 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #1
- Replies: 103
- Views: 194094
Re: Dialog #1
Hi Jan, here is my shot: Jocelyn frowned and yelled at me, "Why church people can't have fun, hein, mom?" I'm going anyway, you know that..." She walked sideways at my front. Seated on the sofa, I kept looking at my tablet. I had to be careful to answer to that one. "It's not ab...
- Mon Jul 03, 2017 7:35 pm
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
- Views: 9024558
Re: First word that comes to mind.
toeLaurie wrote:Broken
- Sat Jul 01, 2017 10:02 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
- Replies: 52
- Views: 104147
Re: Beginnings #2--the 4th judging criterion
Yes, you've chosen an excellent example of a good beginning. (And writers as good as Hemingway have earned the right to use as many or as few commas as they wish!)
- Fri Jun 30, 2017 1:03 pm
- Forum: The Water Cooler
- Topic: First word that comes to mind.
- Replies: 4956
- Views: 9024558
Re: First word that comes to mind.
labyrinthitsjoanne wrote:Amazed
- Thu Jun 29, 2017 10:49 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--PUNCTUATING DIALOGUE
- Replies: 11
- Views: 24081
Re: Be a Better Writer--PUNCTUATING DIALOGUE
Well done!Athayde wrote:I had some doubts about the capitalization after question mark and exclamation point!
"Why should I do that?" she asked.
"Rachel, I love you." He smiled and held her hands.
"Philip is in love with Vida," she said.
This is great, Jan. Thanks.
- Thu Jun 29, 2017 10:48 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Dialog #2
- Replies: 52
- Views: 114980
Re: Dialog #2
Yes, 'grumbled' and 'whispered' are fine here. Well done!
- Thu Jun 29, 2017 10:46 am
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
- Replies: 104
- Views: 203605
Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Hi Jan, here's my title and first sentence: 1. Title: Hitherto (J's series) 2. First sentence: The farmhouse porch light turned on. On the floor, a dropped off baby girl inside a basket, chewed a paper note with the words, please, don't worship or speak in tongues near this child . Thanks. Blessing...
- Fri Jun 23, 2017 10:24 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
- Replies: 15
- Views: 37062
Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
There's nothing to forgive--Jan is my name!Athayde wrote:Please forgive me Glorybee. I've called you Jan...
Thanks for the review. God bless you.
Eneida
- Fri Jun 23, 2017 9:49 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
- Replies: 15
- Views: 37062
Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
Loved the "gnashed his teeth" bit! As to your question, I don't believe I've ever seen a character's thoughts written in parenthesis--that would be a very avant garde and experimental way to write, and probably would be thought very unusual by your audience. Most contemporary writers prefe...