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After brown?

Carol

In the winter, Geraldine had hot oatmeal, brown sugar, and milk for breakfast. After she ate, she would bundle up in her work clothes, and she would go out to do her chores. Yes, even when it was forty below zero. She had to milk the cows, feed the calves, and gather the eggs. Often she had to use a...

Okay, here goes: In the winter Geraldine had hot oatmeal, brown sugar, and milk for breakfast. After she ate, she would bundle up in her work clothes, and she would go out to do her chores. Yes, even when it was forty below zero. She had to milk the cows, feed the calves, and gather the eggs. Often ...

Am I too late for the homework assignment? I could smell the gasoline all around us; we were trapped. The loaded gravel truck had taken a healthy bite out of the rear of our car. Managing to avoid a head-on collision, I looked around for my three daughters. I can smell the gasoline all around me; we...

I have another request, if it hasn't already been asked for...

The use of punctuation in poetry, also when to capitalize in poetry. It's very confusing to me.

No, really, it is okay. Your time is so limited. The others are much more important. I THINK I'm getting the point....

And GRANDCHILDREN always come FIRST, in my book anyway!

As I looked over my entry, Jan, I just realized how ridiculous it was to ask that of you. Please accept my apology. I don't know what I was thinking!
Sorry, class! Enough said?

If I may, Jan, I'd like to give some examples, coming from a "poet", when I've used BOTH verbs and nouns AND adjectives in poetry to make my point. Then I'd like your feedback on it, okay? The first, using mostly nouns and verbs, taken from my poem, "The Book Of My Life": Dip You...

I want to add my CONGRATULATIONS to one and all! Great job!

Carol Penhorwood

Ruth, I LOVED your example. I thought it was great! And Jan, regarding non-fiction, I think it makes your lesson even MORE important for me. Especially since most of my writing is poetry, it is imperative that I choose the RIGHT words to make my point, because I want to make it PRECISE and TIGHT. I ...

Jim, in YOUR example about the night air...

How about using the word...DENSE?

Here's my take and I'm not a fiction writer: Exhausted, Jan plodded into her home after an endless day at work. Slipping off her shoes at the door, she dragged herself into the kitchen for an icy soda and, perhaps, some leftover cake. "Ow!" Lifting her foot, she discovered a Lego embedded ...

I do too....they seem so SPECIAL!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Congratulations to all the well deserved winners!!!

This was helpful to me as well.

I soooo need this lesson on commas. Thanks, Ann!