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Cinnamon Bear (Virginia Bliss)

...I did a lesson on atmosphere here . And here is one on setting, from several years ago. I don’t think I’ve ever done one on tone, but a lot of what I said in the recent voice lessons would apply. Thanks for the clarifications and the links, Jan. I remember your lesson on atmosphere, but I don't ...

The very first challenge entry I sent out in a newly formed buddy group came back fluorescent, since one of my buddies had highlighted all adjectives and adverbs I used in an attempt to write beautifully...It may manifest in a sentence you are really proud of (yeah--guilty!), but is nothing but sel...

This list certainly kept me busy googling terms. Although I'm more or less familiar with many of the terms, I am fuzzy about some of them. I'd like clarification regarding the differences between these three terms: setting, atmosphere, and mood. Although I didn't see it listed, tone might be include...

"Let's begin with the head hopping. The author jumped between the hero and the heroine's thoughts non-stop. I'm talking within the same paragraph! It drove me crazy. It was hard to keep up with who was thinking what." Ha, ha! :lol: Koos, the general writing instruction that we obtain at F...

Or could I just left her age out since the background described her being a senior? Hi, Julie. I have just one observation. I think stating the specific age is relevant, because there is nearly always a big difference between a sixty-five-year-old and a ninety-year-old. Yet both are classified as s...

Since this book is written by an accomplished writer it confused me. Koos, I have been following this thread with great interest, especially since I have always been one to advocate not switching POV within the same chapter or section. :) I read a few more articles on the subject. There seems to be...

Around the end of January, I wrote a vignette for Jan's lesson on characterization in which I invented two characters--Amanda and Lise (Scroll down to the 11th post.): http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?f=67&t=39081 After writing it, I just couldn't bear to leave poor Amanda...

Between Jan's lessons and Steve's posts, I have become convinced that English is every bit as challenging as biology. I assume you take this as a good thing. Absolutely, I think it is a good thing! And I do agree that Jan is tops! I don't see the cheerleader with the pom-poms smiley, so I'll use th...

"The boy had neither candy nor gum, yet his mouth was full; I could only suppose it was dirt as a brown substance leaked from the corners of his lips." Looks better. :) Regarding jargon, I think precise terminology constitutes more than jargon. Knowing the correct terms makes it much easie...

Steve, thanks for your reply to my question. So as I understand it, the sentence: "The boy had neither candy nor gum, yet his mouth was full and I could only suppose it was dirt, as a brown substance leaked from the corners of his lips." Should have the punctuation changed to: "The bo...

Thanks, Jan. Neither Grammarly nor Microsoft Word is flagging it, with or without the comma, so if no comma is needed--no comma!

Cinnamon Bear.

Hi, Diane and Jan!

"The boy had neither candy nor gum, yet his mouth was full and I could only suppose it was dirt, as a brown substance leaked from the corners of his lips."

Should there be a comma after "full"?

Cinnamon Bear

I just feel overwhelmed by all the choices and I desire to keep things simple. Mary, I second Jan’s advice. I think participating in the Challenge is the best way to improve writing. Learning to write publishable pieces is a lot of work. No doubt about it. So I recommend focusing your efforts on th...

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Cinnamon Bear