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by JudySauer
Mon Oct 26, 2015 8:51 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
Replies: 15
Views: 14316

Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL

Thanks Jan for the added clarity.
I see what you mean. I have lots of room for improvement.
Judy
by JudySauer
Mon Oct 26, 2015 6:20 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
Replies: 15
Views: 14316

Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL

1. Josie was over-the-moon giddy about her third date with Charlie. After their second date, “He’s the one!” she gushed to her girlfriends. Much to Josie’s dismay, his movie choice was not romantic nor a comedy. Instead, it was a scary movie. He may have thought she would seek refuge in his arms, bu...
by JudySauer
Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:38 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--WRITING IN DIFFERENT TENSES
Replies: 14
Views: 9845

Re: Be a Better Writer--WRITING IN DIFFERENT TENSES

My exposure to writing in other tenses than 1st person, present tense, is limited.[I want to write very limited but thought the very was not needed.] My lack of depth in other tenses makes me feel ill-equipped to comment on advantages and disadvantages. First person, present tense feels comfortable ...
by JudySauer
Sun Oct 11, 2015 7:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #3
Replies: 54
Views: 41871

Re: Dialog #3

Jan,

I found this lesson on tenses. Haven't gotten into it, but I bet it will open my eyes to a whole new world of information.

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpB ... 67&t=38639

:thankssign

Judy
by JudySauer
Sat Oct 10, 2015 8:00 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #3
Replies: 54
Views: 41871

Re: Dialog #3

Did I find it? she fits Josie’s newborn clothes I forgot "into" Present tense is how I write even though this story was something that happened two days ago. So I need to basically stretch my 4'10" body and mind to past tense. Is there a lesson on doing this effectively? This would use had, not have...
by JudySauer
Sat Oct 10, 2015 3:52 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #3
Replies: 54
Views: 41871

Dialog #3

PART 1 - STORY “Hi there Josie,” Nana says, “thanks for calling us.” Looking at the iPad, “Nahnaa,” she giggles. “Pawpaw,” she coos. “Melissa, her hypnotic blue eyes, and long eyelashes are mesmerizing.” “I know. Not real sure where she got them, but they sure are gorgeous.” “Pawpaw,” Josie whispers...
by JudySauer
Thu Oct 08, 2015 7:10 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #2
Replies: 52
Views: 56107

Re: Dialog #2

“Little Josie is so adorable Judy. You must be very proud to be her grandma,” her sister Toni said. “Yes, she is a cutie. I cannot get enough of her little giggles.” “Let me show you what I’ve been doing. I print out every picture of Josie that Melissa posts on Facebook.” “That’s three inches thick,...
by JudySauer
Thu Oct 08, 2015 5:37 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 90640

Re: Dialog #1

Thanks Jan. I look forward to more lessons. I'm on a roll.

Judy
by JudySauer
Wed Oct 07, 2015 7:45 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 90640

Re: Dialog #1

A defiant Jocelyn, who is 14 years old, questions her mom’s decision. “Why won’t you let me go to the movie with Ashley and Tiffani tonight? All the kids are going.” Tina has boundary issues. She perceives Jocelyn as her friend rather than her daughter. This is the source of all their fights because...
by JudySauer
Tue Oct 06, 2015 7:08 pm
Forum: Platinum Member Perks & Benefits
Topic: And the list goes on...
Replies: 6
Views: 6997

Re: And the list goes on...

I read in a posting today that there are three writing craft books for 500 Platinum members. I've been unable to find them. Do you have the links?

Thanks
Judy :thankssign
by JudySauer
Sun Oct 04, 2015 6:31 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--Commas with conjunctions
Replies: 22
Views: 13494

Re: Be a Better Writer--Commas with conjunctions

Hi Jan,

Even though I was unable to open this lesson from your complied lists, going through the list of actual lessons enabled me to open it. I'm glad my tenacity wasn't letting up because I learned a great acronym FANBOYS. What a great tool. Thank you!

Judy
by JudySauer
Thu Oct 01, 2015 4:50 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion
Replies: 40
Views: 26985

Re: Conclusion #2--the 5th judging criterion

Hi Jan, I'm adding more than 100 words because after reading your lesson, I realized that this entry would have had a better ending without the final paragraph. Your thoughts? http://www.faithwriters.com/wc-article-level3-previous.php?id=50165 =============== To let it go requires us to sever our gl...
by JudySauer
Wed Sep 30, 2015 6:43 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion
Replies: 23
Views: 19150

Re: Conclusion #1--the 5th judging conclusion

Conclusion of nonfiction challenge article. After reading critiques, and taking your lessons, I see the errors of my ways. These final 150 words (some editing made) is my homework. The week is running out of time and I’m not ready to let go of my granddaughter, Josie, seventeen months old.. Anxietie...
by JudySauer
Wed Sep 30, 2015 5:42 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY
Replies: 47
Views: 31849

Re: Be a Better Writer--COMMAS ARE TRICKY

Jan,

I get the message, You cannot post edits in this forum.

Maybe it's just the one link in Beginning Writers.

Judy

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