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by stepping_Heavenward
Sat Feb 20, 2010 3:47 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 81370

Hi Jan,

Thanks so much for pointing out to me where I goofed-- in that one little paragraph. :( And it did make a big difference in writing such a short story. Again, thanks, Jan.

I appreciate your encouragements, time, and lessons you provide for us.
God bless you richly.
by stepping_Heavenward
Thu Feb 18, 2010 10:48 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Dialog #1
Replies: 103
Views: 81370

Here's my version of your "hot mess", Jan. I don't want to convey a picture of Tina as a wimpy young mom, and let an immature teen get away with her whining and whims. If I were to write a Christian story, this is how I'd write it and make a difference. “Yeah, I heard about it, Jos. Ashley’s Mom cal...
by stepping_Heavenward
Mon Jan 25, 2010 3:28 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's New "Class"--Writing Basics
Replies: 115
Views: 63929

The Other Wise Man By Henry Van Dyke “The young mother’s face grew white with terror . She clasped her child to her bosom, and crouched motionless in the darkest corner of the room, covering him with the folds of her robe , lest he should awake and cry.” I think this is weak writing: The young mothe...

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