Thanks so much for pointing out to me where I goofed-- in that one little paragraph. And it did make a big difference in writing such a short story. Again, thanks, Jan.
I appreciate your encouragements, time, and lessons you provide for us.
God bless you richly.
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Here's my version of your "hot mess", Jan. I don't want to convey a picture of Tina as a wimpy young mom, and let an immature teen get away with her whining and whims. If I were to write a Christian story, this is how I'd write it and make a difference. “Yeah, I heard about it, Jos. Ashley’s Mom cal...
- Mon Jan 25, 2010 3:28 pm
- Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
- Topic: Jan's New "Class"--Writing Basics
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The Other Wise Man By Henry Van Dyke “The young mother’s face grew white with terror . She clasped her child to her bosom, and crouched motionless in the darkest corner of the room, covering him with the folds of her robe , lest he should awake and cry.” I think this is weak writing: The young mothe...