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by kafrak
Tue Mar 15, 2016 6:12 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 86952

Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

I appreciate it, Jan. I understand where you are coming from. I struggle with this concept and know I need to improve tremendously in this area. I am worried my book is poorly crafted. I got carried away with the assignment and apologize.
by kafrak
Tue Mar 15, 2016 1:44 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story
Replies: 58
Views: 86952

Re: #13--The Well-Crafted Short Story

I hope I am doing this right... Telling:Jack was there early and talked with the Chaplain. He shared his story, admitted his mistakes, and expressed the desire to get back to God. Jack felt an emptiness within him. Reach as he would for it, that feeling of incompleteness, aloneness would not be fill...
by kafrak
Mon Mar 14, 2016 7:04 pm
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL
Replies: 15
Views: 30137

Re: Be a Better Writer--SHOW, DON'T TELL

Show – Don’t Tell Homework Kathy Curry HOMEWORK: 1. Re-write this mostly-telling paragraph so that it contains more showing. Josie felt really happy when she was with Charlie. It was their third date, and she thought maybe he was the one for her. But she had second thoughts when he took her to a sca...
by kafrak
Fri Mar 11, 2016 8:24 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 174515

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

I will make the changes you suggest. This is what follows: . It was not a snake, it was not a lizard. Its skin sparkled like the most perfect diamonds and its eyes were such a deep cerulean blue you could get lost gazing into them. This little creature had both, wings and fins, almost like a fish bu...
by kafrak
Fri Mar 11, 2016 8:16 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
Replies: 129
Views: 237054

Re: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverb

I will definitely work on this. I have gotten 3 honorable mentions in the beginner's category, but have yet to place. I need to figure out where I am lacking. I know I tend to get wordy. I so appreciate these lessons and your input! :thankssign
by kafrak
Fri Mar 11, 2016 3:43 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverbs
Replies: 129
Views: 237054

Re: Jan's Writing Basics #2: Beware of Adjectives and Adverb

Jan’s Writing Basics Adjectives and Adverbs HOMEWORK Exhausted, weary, and worn out, Jan walked tiredly into her house at the end of a long, seemingly endless day at work. She slipped off her dark ebony shoes at the door and plodded unenthusiastically toward the kitchen. All she wanted was an icy co...
by kafrak
Fri Mar 11, 2016 2:56 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 174515

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Once upon a time, before we understood time, when the world had first been created; God created a small serpentine creature. It was a time before we understood time; the time of the creation. Jehovah said; "Let the land produce creatures of its kind..." and in response colors swirled, the...
by kafrak
Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:27 am
Forum: Jan's Writing Basics
Topic: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion
Replies: 104
Views: 174515

Re: Beginnings (#1)--the 4th judging criterion

Once upon a time, before we understood time, when the world had first been created; God created a small serpentine creature.

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