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Topic: Discipleship (02/23/04)

TITLE: The Barefoot Disciple
By Linda Germain
02/29/04

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By any standard, her radiance was a sight to behold. The straw hat, casually hanging down her straight back by a yellow ribbon, gave little protection to fair skin, dark shiny hair and flashing blue eyes. Her sisters were almost running to keep up with her confident and energetic stride as she led the way to her favorite place, Sunday morning church services.

Across the street, a young man in a crisp National Guard uniform came to an abrupt halt. He could hardly believe his eyes. She was the most beautiful girl he had ever seen. Totally captured, he did an about face, marched to the other side, and surrendered to his future. The year was 1915.

My grandfather took great pleasure in telling the story, reaching back through time, grasping for that dim memory. Some sixty years later she still had that engaging way that all her children and grandchildren adored. Life had not been easy, not for one minute, but her unwavering faith and spunk became an affirming testimony.

By her own admission, there were times of weariness, especially when life threatening kidney disease sent her to a distant hospital. The only transportation was by train. She remembered rattling along in the baggage car, the only available place to put a bed. Her pregnant, toxic body screamed in pain, but constant communion with the Lord remained her lifeline. Neither the baby nor the kidney survived. She recalled being so sick she could barely tolerate the smallest sound.

Eventually, she was back on her feet and back in labor. Children piled up like a doll collection. She marshaled her young troops, telling them, "Work brings a sense of accomplishment." She trudged down to the creek to drag up tree limbs to build a fire under the wash pot. The older boys pumped water and carried it in buckets to her well-tended garden where she used a gourd dipper to irrigate each vegetable plant. To make the work more palatable, she made up games, told Bible stories, sang the chick-a-dee song, and taught them about nature.

Somewhere along the way, the man she married seemed to lose his ability to provide, so she worked from sunrise until after dark. Selling a few eggs, and the butter she churned, generated a little money but never enough to buy shoes to wear to her favorite place.

The Bible and the dictionary were the only books she read. Wisdom gleaned from this tiny library and struggles to sustain the large brood were life lessons to her children. They watched her pray over everything from a sick baby to the old cow. They listened to her clear sweet voice sing encouraging hymns as her hands worked and her back ached.

During the Great Depression, she willingly shared with beggars what little food was available, another example of walking the talk. Seven pairs of offspring eyes drank in her benevolence and obedience. Sweetly, she quoted, "You never know when you are entertaining angels unaware." Their mother was the personification of love, her price above rubies.

Her delightful laughter cushioned some of those grueling early times. Once, when all the chickens had ganged up on the runt of the bunch and pecked off his feathers, she came to the rescue by sewing a protective outfit on him until he could grow his own covering. No chicken ever had a better tailor. He was named for the funny little sound he made, "Pee-urp." The Pee-urp suit story is legendary.

Unafraid to stomp her foot in righteous indignation and defend her own, she surprised a sneaky snake who was gulping a precious, just laid egg. She grabbed him behind his thieving head and forced him to eject the ill-gotten loot, still intact. Then, she took him out of commission with the hoe.

This dear and creative woman had an unfailing adherence to the tenets of the Scriptures. Her stance on honoring God and acting "right" was a beacon of inspiration. At the departure of any child or grandchild, she would stand on the back porch, smiling and pointing her finger to the sky. That was her message to remind us, "Don't forget God is in control."

In the beginning, a smitten young soldier discovered a beautiful treasure parading by, so happy to be on her way to worship. At her death, multitudes of family gathered to pay respect to a matriarch whose living discipleship will influence generations. In our commemorative photograph, each of us is pointing toward heaven.


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Corinne Smelker03/01/04
LOVED this story! I want to meet this lady! Wonderful turns of phrases here, and the image conjured up in my mind with a chicken coat!

Well done, well written, and lively!
Leticia Caroccio03/01/04
Your article brought a lump to my throat. I remember my Godly grandmother. What a wonderful woman of God she was. She raised 13 children and had a hand in raising more than 40 of her grandchildren. When she died in 1990, her grandchildren numbered more than 80 and there were 15 great-grandchildren. Every year at our family reunions, we all tell amazing stories of "Mamita" that bring laughter and tears to everyone. Thank you so much for your wonderful article.
L.M. Lee03/02/04
what a beautiful woman. you need to write a book about her
Linda Germain 03/02/04
My mother sent this to her siblings (all 7 still alive) It seems unanimous, they WANT a book because there are volumes still unsaid about this incredible woman! This seems to have triggered tons of other memories(all remembered "Pee-Urp"). I asked the Lord to guide me...HELP!! I may need advice from some of you dear, sweet people on FW.
Glenda Lagerstedt03/02/04
I can only say amen to what your other friends have said here and to applaud the idea of a book! This is absolutely wonderful.
Dave Wagner03/02/04
>> Life had not been easy, not for one minute…<<

Ouch. Hopefully, this is a hyperbolic statement...

>> She recalled being so sick she could barely tolerate the smallest sound. <<

Now that...is...sick!

>> Children piled up like a doll collection. <<

LOL

>> Somewhere along the way, the man she married seemed to lose his ability to provide…<<

That's afwully vague...there's obviously a lot more you could have revealed about this..."somewhere along the way"? You make it seem like he simply lost interest. Was he injured? Lazy? Info!!! More info!!! Why did he leave the family hanging like that?

That does it...where's that book... O_O
Linda Germain 03/03/04
***Actually, MR. Wagner, it was even WORSE than stated!!!!!Since seven of her children are living, and knowing they would read this, I was attempting to be KIND about their father. He suffered from an EXTREME mental illness, even thinking he worked for the FBI!! And YES , she TOLD ME HERSELF, The slightest sound was excruciating! Remember, this was in the days before antibiotics. She was so toxic no one believed she would live, and she had to be hauled by BAGGAGE car because her little town had NO ambulance. ...and she literally had NO SHOES for years(as in barefoot). This is not a cute little writing exercise for an idiot who just fell off the writing turnip truck, but I do believe SOME thoughts are full of sound and fury and signifying NOTHING. To metaphor or NOT to metaphor, that is the question.
shirley shields03/03/04
I do enjoyed your story, I had a godly grandmother like this and feel so blessed.She had very little monitarily but God spoke though her so well. God Bless
Annette Bury03/03/04
Loved your story!! And I hope you share more on FW, and in a book!
Christine Rhee03/04/04
This sent chills up my spine....I loved the title. Your grandmother's strength and hard life reminds me of my mother-in-law in Korea. What a blessing when God gives us these matriachs to look up to, their examples to follow...There aren't enough of these people around, and a book would indeed be a blessing to many.
Wilma Straight03/04/04
A descriptive, nostaligic, and loving honorarium to your grandmother. Amazing woman.
Dave Wagner03/05/04
Whoa, wait a minute here...hold the phone...there was no sarcasm or stinging intended at all...I'm kind of floored at the response.

I enjoyed this piece tremendously, and was attempting to respond as such. I was hooked as a reader and was desirous of more information, that's all...I'm mortified that I was received in any other way. Please forgive me...there was absolutely nothing hostile or critical in my intentions. I enjoyed the piece greatly...

A thousand pardons.
David Dawson03/05/04
Very well written indeed! I had visions of this wonderful lady throughout my reading of this story and it has greatly encouraged me. She has blessed me too! Thanks for posting this!
Dave Wagner03/05/04
OK, lemme try this again.

>> Life had not been easy, not for one minute…<<

I can only hope that she had a few moments of joy and rest in there somewhere. If not, my admiration for her is increased, and seasoned with a bit of pity.

>> She recalled being so sick she could barely tolerate the smallest sound. <<

That’s incredible. I can’t imagine ever being that sick. I read things like this and realize that I am soft, and know so little.

>> Children piled up like a doll collection. <<

This is an outstanding line. It made me laugh out loud when I read it.

>> Somewhere along the way, the man she married seemed to lose his ability to provide…<<

There must be more to this part of the story. My curiosity is piqued. I wish you would continue your story. If it ever is fleshed out into book form, I’d be on the list of people to grab a copy.


I had hoped that my initial critique would come across this way. I had not even considered it would read otherwise. I was genuinely happy after reading it, and thus, I suppose, constructed my thoughts in a light-hearted, fun way, reflecting my mood. It came back to bite, for which I apologize again.
Donna Anderson03/05/04
Oh my, there were so many comments here that I read them before the article! The story is sweet and strong (makes me miss my gramma)and I agree with all the above! Even Mr. Wagner (edited) :)
Lynne Cox03/06/04
It's pretty hard to get into a lot of detail in 750 words. Personally, I liked the vagueness - "the man she married seemed to lose his ability to provide" - it leaves you wondering.

This woman was a true disciple. She accepted that life was hard and didn't try to paper over it with pretties. This is a wonderful story and well-written.
Anna Johnson03/08/04
Linda: I agree with eveyone else; this story is so beautifully written and her example is something we all must aspire to. Thanks so much for sharing. She is the grandmother I wish I had had.
Jean Ann Semple03/09/04
This is really lovely!
Jenan
Bertie Patano03/11/04
Mr. Wagner,your comment< now that is sick> makes me feel you have never had a migraine headache. I do have them: I can't bear motion, sound or light. Everything in the stomach come up. I must take my medication and stay in a dark room. Take it easy on people. Each of us knows something about certain subjects but nobody has experenced all subjects common to mankind..unless it is our Lord and Savior, Jesus Christ. Bertie Patano.


   
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