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Topic: Betrayal (02/16/04)

TITLE: Liar, Liar, Pants On Fire



The crystal blue sky foretold of a glorious day to come. The sunbeams licked the morning dew from the grass with the promise of warmth to wrap around the day. Spirits lifted as eyes opened to enjoy the beauty unfolding before them. Only good could fall on the world today.

A pinprick of gray came into view. It grew moment by moment and soon it resembled the deep charcoal of a mountainside. The murky mass spread its tentacles across the now darkening cobalt backdrop. The slow, deep rumbling told all who heard it that the sunís promises of the morning would be only stormy betrayal by afternoon.

This is exactly how Satan worms his way into our lives and turns us from people who want to please God into people who turn those promises into betrayal. The sin begins as a small gray pinprick. A small white lie here, a reasonable excuse not to tithe this week, prayer time forsaken for something other than God and then some more lies a little later in the week.

The Holy Spiritís small voice begins to beckon us to do something but betrayal has begun and it gets a little easier to ignore that inner calling. Then the sin begins to grow and spread its tentacles into other areas of our lives. Areas of sin that we thought were conquered suddenly rear their ugly heads and we again fall into the trap. Betrayal of our Lord becomes easier and easier everyday.

When we fall prey to betrayal, anger is one of the most prevalent emotions displayed. Fire will explode from our mouths as we vow revenge against the betrayer. The memory of the betrayal lingers, not only for days, but for years.

It is allowed to fester and grow into that dark gray mountainside and can take over our lives until it is the only reason for our existence. Everyone around us can hear the deep low rumblings. They may even try to warn us about our thunderous behavior only to have their warnings fall on deaf ears.

Reaction to betrayal is usually knee jerk on our part and it really doesnít happen that often in our lives. There is one person who is betrayed on a moment by moment basis and His reaction is to be loving, caring, and most of all, forgiving. His creation, us, deserve His revenge. But His love for us is so great that it can overcome His broken heart.

Every sin committed by us is a betrayal to our creator. Godís reaction to that betrayal was to send His Son to pay the price of that betrayal. Christís death on the cross and His resurrection covered every betrayal of God from the beginning of time and will continue to cover it until the end of time as we know it.

If you havenít accepted Christ as your Savior your betrayal of God is still on the books and one day you will reap His revenge for that betrayal. You can change that outcome by doing one simple thing, ask Jesus Christ to be your personal Savior. The moment you do, your betrayal of God will be covered and forgiven.

ďAs far as the east is from the westÖĒ Ps 103:12 KJV is how far He will remove that betrayal from you. It will be as if you never committed it in the first place. You can count on that fact and never have to worry about being betrayed by the person who made that promise. God doesnít lie.

Member Comments
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Anna Johnson02/23/04
Karen: Your descriptions are awesome -- very poetic and emit great emotion. And great job tying it all together with our Lord. Very nicely done!
Dave Wagner02/23/04
True, there are some nicely structured thoughts, phrases and sentences here, but the transitions are kind of jarring. It starts as a tale of fiction, shifts quickly into nonfiction; a lesson on the tactics of the enemy, but before getting to the meat, it shifts again into describing different ways betrayal is handled, then shifts into an altar call...

Each of this pieces individually, stand well on their own, but they are kinda forced together here, in a way that kept me wondering what the next paragraph will travel into.

I appreciate your intentions, and again, you probably have some terrific fiction in your collection - you use descriptive language very well. But this piece is kind of a mishmash. Needs some polish, I think. Lentghen it, flesh it out, there are some good thoughts here. But I would rewrite the first paragraph and make it more consistently a devotional-type entry.
Donna Anderson02/24/04
Good article, Karen. Betrayal isn't an easy thing to dismiss without remembering the mercy and extending the grace of God.
L.M. Lee02/26/04
loved the title! I hadn't thought of that statement in years... nice article