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Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Romance (12/06/04)

TITLE: Almost-Perfect Romance
By Joanne Malley
12/12/04

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Almost-Perfect Romance
By Joanne Malley



On the shores of the Caribbean
With water clear and blue,
It would have been the perfect place
To find romance for two.

Instead we took the children
For a frolic in the sun,
Our daughter swam with dolphins
And our son sought island fun.

Our room was dreamy comfort
Fragrant flowers filled our suite,
A moment for a stolen kiss--
Our only lover’s treat.

Children always near us
And no place for privacy,
“Mommy can I sleep with you?”
“Daddy, tickle me!”

We settled on a beach chair
While we lay there hand in hand,
“Daddy can you bury me
Beneath the fine white sand?”

So much for all the romance
It just wasn’t meant to be,
Instead we’d focus on the things
That we could do and see.

Our vacation is now over
And we’re in our home sweet home,
The children lay there sleeping
And it’s time to be alone.

We finally found the romance
Amidst the glow of candlelight,
Once again the two of us
Can share a special night.


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Joanne Malley12/13/04
Hi, all--Our recent trip to Punta Cana was extremely beautiful and proved to be the most romantic place to be with your spouse...except we had two kids in tow! LOL Anyway, it was kind of comical that despite the beauty around us and the perfect opportunity, young kids just don't work in the mix! Jo
Karri Compton12/13/04
Beautiful - I can relate! Well done, sister. God bless, Karri
WENDY DECKER12/13/04
Adorable poem, Jo! Been there too!
Kevin Kindrick12/13/04
Once again, well-written Jo, I'm glad to see everything worked out for you and your husband in the end. I hope that, after I have kids, my wife and I can keep the same kind of romance you and your husband seem to enjoy.

God bless,

Kevin
Jodi Hodge12/13/04
Joanne, been there done that. These are special times with our children, though. Before you know it, they'll be out of the house. Great poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I thought your word flow was great.
Debbie OConnor12/13/04
Great job, Joanne! I love it. My hubby and I know how you feel!
Lynda Lee Schab 12/14/04
Jo,
Loved this! You write poetry exceptionally well. Great rhythm & rhyme.
Yes, there are times we have to put our romantic needs aside...sigh. Things we do for the children... :-)
Glad you had fun though!
Great writing, as always!
Love, Lynda
David Stewart12/14/04
Great poem! The words you use help us see and feel when we were in similar situations. As a dad of 4 I really enjoyed this. Merry Christmas!
Karissa Rouzaud12/14/04
Great poem!! We have 4 small kidos, so can also relate!
Mitzi Busby12/14/04
Jo, Super job. Enjoyable to read.
Deborah Anderson12/14/04
Good job, Jo...and so very realistic. God bless you.
Lois Jennison Tribble12/15/04
What a blessing we can find romance at home with the kids in bed -- otherwise, a whole lot of us would be sunk! I don't know how you managed to find time to write this on top of everything else, but I'm sure glad you did! Welcome home, Jo. Wonderful poem!
Tesiri Moweta12/16/04
I think it's perfect romance!Great poem!
Keep winning and shining for Jesus.
MILENA ASSENOVA12/17/04
I AGREE AND RELATE. VERY UPLIFTING. MERRY XMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! GOD BLESS
Linda Germain 12/18/04
Excellent, as always! Your vacation sounds wonderful.
Joyce Poet12/19/04
The results of your romance can sometimes put a damper on your romance. :::smile::: But after two kids, if you're still searching for that special alone time, alone or away, then I'd say you're doing great, if not better than most. Lovely poem... and story.
Joyce Poet12/19/04
Sorry, I meant AT HOME or away. Trying to get the rest of these read before the end of the night and, apparently, don't type well in a rush.
Donna J. Shepherd12/21/04
Loved it! Thanks for the fun read!
John Hunt01/08/05
Wonderful prose, as always, Jo.
Isn't it neat how love "sneeks in" in many different ways!

Nicely done!