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Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Romance (12/06/04)

TITLE: The One Who Loves Me
By Lois Jennison Tribble
12/11/04

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I was looking for my knight in shining armor
in the arms of the golden dragon.
Scales gleaming and glistening,
I was bound by his radiant glow.

Then you came.
Shining sword in hand,
you cast your eyes upon my loathsomeness.
You viewed my shame,
not with pity, not contempt:
your gaze was love.

And in your eyes
I saw mirrored the reflection
of who I could become --
the woman you wanted
me to be.

Seizing on that miracle
I begged you to slay the dragon.
His hot breath hounded me
but you answered sternly:
"Not yet, my beloved.
Not yet, my bride.

"I have vanquished, sealed his doom,
but his day is not yet over.
Leave him behind,
and follow me."

Tenderly you swept me up
in your strong arms
and set me upon your white horse.
Wrapped in your cloak
I am shielded from all the elements.

The dragon hissed and writhed,
but could do us no real harm.
His golden glow,
just tarnished brass beside you.

You took me to the river
and plunged me in pure, clean water.
I drowned both to myself,
and to my shame.

You pulled me from the depths, spotless;
Clothing me with your own white robe,
drenched in precious blood,
your blood for me.

I am yours . . . you are mine.
Never to suffer the torments
of the dragon and his seed.
You hold me when the earth shakes
and my father and mother flee.

Safe in the arms
of the one who loves me,
free to be the one
reflected in your eyes.

Jesus:
lover of my soul.
My creator, my redeemer,
my joy, my hope.
The bread of life from heaven,
son of God, son of man.

I was looking for my knight in shining armor,
for one who is worthy, and faithful:
To have and to hold
for better or worse,
for richer or poorer,
in sickness and in health,
to love and to cherish,
whom death cannot part.

There is no other,
I look no more:
You are that One.


Member Comments
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Norma OGrady12/13/04
long poem...smile enjoyed reading
Yeshua bless you through this christmas season and have a "HAPPY NEW YEAR 2005"
lovingly Norma
Debbie OConnor12/14/04
Wow! Lois, this is wonderful. Takes my breath away. I love the imagery throughout the poem, and my favorite part is the conclusion. He IS the one. Romantic, passionate & powerful. Great work!
Jodi Hodge12/14/04
Great job. I have to agree, great conclusion. Great insight.
Mitzi Busby12/14/04
Lois,
Absolutely beautiful! You did an awesome job with this.
David Stewart12/14/04
I enjoyed this poem very much. I was wrapped up in the story. Merry Christmas.
Deborah Anderson12/14/04
Beautiful, Lois. :-) God bless you.
WENDY DECKER12/15/04
Lois,

I loved your poem. It flowed throughout and your word pictures told a beautiful story.
Tesiri Moweta12/15/04
Great entry. I love every line but this "...whom death cannot part" totally pierces my heart in ways no one can imagine.
Fantastic work! Thanks for sharing.
Keep winning and shining for Jesus.
MILENA ASSENOVA12/16/04
I LOVE THIS, 'COZ I REALLY RELATE TO HOW YOU FEEL AND THAT IS HOW I FEEL. MERRY XMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! GOD BLESS
Joanne Malley12/16/04
Lois,
Wonderful poem--very deep with words well chosen. Nice imagery! You captured the essence of true love. Jo
Joyce Poet12/19/04
Love it! Love it! LOVE IT! It's like combining every fictional story of "fairytale" romance and making them all come true in the true Light of our Messiah. Beautiful! You've told my love story... all the way from the dragon to being washed in the river. How could you have known? :::smile::: I'd love to see this one get exposure. May the Lord bless it!