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Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Romance (12/06/04)

TITLE: The Prince and the Girl
By Rebecca Johnson
12/10/04

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I know a Prince whose face burns like the sun
And whose crown is kissed by diamonds.
His castle rules the stars of the heavens;
His chariot rides on the wings of the clouds.
Do you hear the song of this Prince?
He says that he is
In love.
I know a girl whose feet are black with ashes
And whose clothes are ragged and torn.
Her house sits, crumbling, on the outskirts of the village;
Her hands are rough with blisters and callouses.
She has never known riches or romance.
But she aches to fall
In love.
One bright morning the Prince on his white steed
Takes a gallop through the woods.
Dashing out of the trees, whose house should he pass
But the poor maiden’s. And she
Only just appearing in the doorway
Pauses at the sight of this rider on his horse.
Trembling besets her, the pulse
Of love.
Breathless, heart pounding, eyes wide.
But now she tears away her gaze,
Lowers her head, and slides back into the shadows.
She is a lowly slave; he is a Prince.
How can she even consider
That together they might partake
Of love?
She does not see the reaction of the Prince.
An intense longing, almost desperation,
Sparks his eyes, and he reigns in his horse.
With gaze set on the dark doorway,
The Prince leaps from the stallion.
Could he be coming
For love?
His steps are firm but hurried. Pausing not,
He runs up to the cottage only to stop at the empty door.
For a long moment, he only stares.
Then his voice, soft, beckoning,
“Come with me, dearest; I await you.
Forsake your rags
For love.”
She is there in a moment, blushing,
But she will not meet his eyes.
Hearing the tremor of her heart,
The Prince bows before her on one knee.
Holding his hands out to her, he whispers,
“I am in love with you.
Will you open your heart to me,
To love?”
Now she is sobbing, for her heart thrills,
Yet panics, at the Prince’s words.
“You would have me?” she gasps.
“If you will say yes,” he replies.
She nods; he smiles, then laughs out loud.
Oh, what a beautiful thing -
To love!
Flinging his arms around her shoulders
And begging her rest her head on his chest,
The Prince sweeps the girl away in his love.
He has found her. He has taken her from the ashes
And let her become his princess.
He has captured her heart
With love.
Their romance will never know an end.
Need I explain?
I am the girl, and the Prince is my Lord.
His voice has called to me
With a passion I can never match, only accept.
He pursues me
With love.


Member Comments
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Karri Compton12/13/04
This is so beautiful and heart-warming. Maybe you could find a way to break it into sections so it's easier to read.
Blessings,
Karri
Norma OGrady12/13/04
enjoyable reading...
It would be easier to read and to grasp the nature, significance, or meaning if you rightly divide the word!
Otherwise, well done..
Yeshua bless you this Christmas season and have a "HAPPY NEW YEAR"
2005
lovingly
Norma
WENDY DECKER12/13/04
Very beautiful writing.
Jodi Hodge12/14/04
Sweet. I liked how it pulled me in and kept my interest. Good writing.
Tesiri Moweta12/15/04
I am totally in love with this poem! great writing!What romance between you and the Lord!
Keep winning and shining for Jesus.
Debbie OConnor12/15/04
This is just great! My heart is pounding. I'm a sucker for true fairy tales. God bless!
David Stewart12/15/04
Great poem, great story. I really enjoyed reading this. Merry Christmas.
MILENA ASSENOVA12/16/04
VERY CREATIVE, ENJOYED IT VERY MUCH. MERRY XMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! GOD BLESS
Mitzi Busby12/16/04
Super imagery. Very Good work.
Joyce Poet12/19/04
This is wonderful proof that "fairytale" kind of love is just like any other "good and perfect" gift... it comes from above. I am truly blessed by your poem. Yes, it would have been much, much easier to read had it been broken up into stanzas. But the content itself was wonderful.