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Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Romance (12/06/04)

TITLE: One Strange Dawn
By Beatrice Ang
12/09/04

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One Strange Dawn
for Kuro-chan

Beneath a cape of mystery,
Beyond the gates of reverie,
Lo! The torch that lights the chamber,
Close to heart forever remember.

As the moon that shines at night,
Darkness covers all despite,
A holy gift that's rendered near,
And so with it brings one to fear.

And yet as though time is lost,
One moment's past, forever frost.
Forgotten memories linger on,
Since love gave birth to one strange dawn.


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Karri Compton12/13/04
Good poetry. I'm not sure what it means, though. Maybe you could lengthen it a bit to make your theme more clear.
Blessings, Karri
Norma OGrady12/13/04
Love is strange...
For the line between love and hate is very frangible..
Yeshua bless you this Christmas season and have a *HAPPY NEW YEAR* 2005
Jodi Hodge12/13/04
Very well written. That's what I like about poetry, it's a mystery in itself. True art.
Debbie OConnor12/15/04
Very interesting poem. I can't believe you're only fifteen. Quite a talent!
Mitzi Busby12/15/04
Beatrice, There is a common mention of the moon with respect to romance. I liked it very much.
Gabriel Munnonock12/15/04
Very good use of literation and painting the scene. It goes to show that not all poetry is just black and white. All though the lines 'Lo! The torch that lights the chamber,
Close to heart forever remember' doesn't really flow. I don't know it's pretty parallel but it just doesn't balance out like the rest of the lines do.
MILENA ASSENOVA12/16/04
WOW! YOU ARE SO YOUNG YET HAVE THE LYRICS OF A TRUE POET. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. MERRY XMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR! GOD BLESS