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Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Romance (12/06/04)

TITLE: Stumbling
By aaron donley
12/08/04

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And I drive through dreary streets to get your oil changed.
As you wait at a stoplight to get my dry cleaning.

I know that life is more,
Than waiting.
For the second to pass,
The day to retreat,
To the sea of our memories,
Jumbled up,
Mixed together.

Like us.

With Christmas plays,
And ice creams,
School days,
Inflated dreams.
With dillusions
And contusions.
Hopes and hurts.
Griefs and graces.
Soaps and Bertís.
Briefs and braces.

Jumbled,

Like us.

So we stay,
Day to day,
Waiting for the second to pass,
Grasping it,
And it is gone.

But you are there,
In the night.
Warm and familiar,
Dreamy and lazy,
Like the sea.
That we have filled.
Spilling towards each other,
All these years.

It exists out there.
Itís gravity changes things.

We stumble,
We stumble towards each other, towards Him.

When I was a kid, I dreamed of a future.
And now all I have is you.

What I wanted the whole time.


Through the graveyard
The couples before us
Together, with no one alive to care anymore
About their wedding,
Or anniversary,
Or mortgage.
No one really cared but them anyway.
But them.
So it dies with them,
Stored in the mind of God.

I want to be there with you.
So that,
When God thinks of you,
He thinks of me too.
When He sees me,
He looks at the one I loved.
You.

My bride who I gave myself for.
Just like Him.

Iíll get your oil changed.
And when I get home youíll have my shirts.


Member Comments
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Joanne Malley12/13/04
It's nice to see so many guys enter this challenge. Funny last lines! Joanne
Norma OGrady12/13/04
Men are great poets..King David is proof...along with songs of Solomon
Yeshua bless you through this christmas season and have a "HAPPY NEW YEAR 2005"
lovingly Norma
Debbie OConnor12/13/04
I love this! Especially the line about stumbling towards each other and stumbling toward God. But all of it is great. A keeper!
Jodi Hodge12/13/04
Your poem makes me want to go squeeze my kids. Time is so precious, and then it's just your true love! I love it.
Tesiri Moweta12/14/04
This is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read. I love it so much! Thank you for sharing and keep winning and shining for Jesus.
Maxx .12/14/04
This is a truely awesome piece, you lil upstart, you!
Deborah Anderson12/14/04
I thought this was very nice, Aaron. God bless you.
Joyce Poet12/14/04
There is so much reality in your poem... and so very much sincerity. Time is precious and you've given us a small portion of your treasure to keep us stilled in a moment... if just for a moment.
Lois Jennison Tribble12/15/04
Deeply sentimental steeped in the reality of life. A touching portrayal, Aaron. Welcome to FaithWriters! We'll want to see more.
David Stewart12/15/04
great poem. makes me wish I had someone again. Merry Christmas!
Mitzi Busby12/15/04
Aaron,
Great work. Very well done.
MILENA ASSENOVA12/16/04
TRUE INSPIRATION
MERRY XMAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR!
GOD BLESS
Phyllis Inniss 12/17/04
Great poem. I like the way you brought the ordinary everyday things together with the spiritual. God bless you and have a merry Xmas and a Happy New Year.
Linda Germain 12/18/04
Aaron, you have captured the true essence of REAL love. The shared activities of daily living, the trusting to be there, the comfort...if you speak from experience, you are truly blessed, as is your wife. You have learned something few ever do (sadly).
God Bless and welcome to FW! ~LG~