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Topic: Hunger (11/08/04)

TITLE: The Old Jalopy and the Five Thousand
By John Hunt
11/08/04

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Dad always seemed to walk so much faster than I. Often, I would find myself lagging more and more behind his lanky stride, suddenly finding myself in the unenviable position of having to hastily run across the parking lot to try and catch up to him. This particular day was no exception, as he had reached the old Buick well ahead of me. I quickly jumped into the passenger seat of the archaic behemoth as he started the engine. After a few sputters – along with a crass backfire from the tailpipe – we were well on our. This was a scene that replayed itself many times during my childhood: day trips back and forth to the auto parts store.

“Dad, what’s a jalopy?” I casually asked as I pushed my Matchbox® car back and forth on the hard, cracked dashboard.

Dad skillfully mastered the steering wheel, as only dads could do, while displaying an emotionless expression that portrayed a sort of apathy. He seemed almost detached from us, as if he was already tearing apart the engine from that old, infirmed vehicle in his mind. “Where did you hear that word?”

His reply wasn’t accusational, or even angry, but rather, just plain curious. “From Mom,” I said. “She said she wishes you would get rid of that ‘old jalopy.’”

It was forgivable for me, at that age, to say whatever came to mind. After all, I was still in the blissful innocence of early childhood and was completely unaware of the torrential conflicts of adults.

Dad didn’t necessarily seem wounded, but then he never did. He wasn’t one to wear his emotions on his sleeve. “A jalopy is a car you have to have when you can’t afford to have another.”

I was perplexed. “Huh?”

“Someday you’ll understand, son.”

I told myself that when I got big, I would always have a shiny new car. But I didn’t dare tell Dad that.

After we got home, Dad puttered on the car while Mom incessantly nagged. She wasn’t necessarily mean, mind you. But rather, she just wasn’t used to owning cars that you have to work on to keep running; her family had always had new ones when she was growing up. Inevitably, the ensuing return journey to the parts store came upon us.

In the midst of traveling back and forth to the auto parts store that day, I had missed lunch. It was no big deal, really. After all, trips to the parts store usually only lasted thirty minutes, tops. I could always catch up on a meal in a heartbeat, as busy days of play often required lunch on the fly. But something was wrong this time. Actually, something was terribly wrong. The parts store didn’t have that part that Dad needed. The man behind the counter said that they would have it in the next day; but Dad simply couldn’t wait that long. Mom and dad needed two working automobiles, and more importantly, Dad needed the peace around the house. So, off we went to Calumet City, the only place in the world that would likely have the part that Dad needed. A burning sensation began to pierce my tummy. What had started as mere hunger had turned into a stabbing pang. I didn’t dare ask my dad to stop and get food. Fast food was a luxury that we simply couldn’t afford. Besides, in that day and age, there weren’t too many McDonald’s® around.

The hunger continued to ravage my stomach as the minutes seemed to drag on and on. The usual excitement of riding on the expressway that led to Chicago was lost to me. All I could think about was eating something – anything – even if it meant those awful vegetables that my parents always forced down me at dinnertime.

For some reason, I thought about the story from Sunday school that week. The old lady with the beehive hairdo and large purse had told us how Jesus had fed the five thousand from just a few loaves and some fish. If he could do that back then, why couldn’t he do it now?
I prayed.

No sooner had I finished praying, than I noticed that my dad had pulled into a diner. Greasy hamburgers and French fries never tasted so good. Just as Jesus had done nearly two thousand years ago, my dad noticed my need, and met it. Of course, he was probably hungry, too.


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Joanne Malley11/15/04
John,
Entertaining article! I never made it to the auto parts store with my dad--he was too busy blowing up engines due to a lack of oil! We were just always at the dealer buying new cars!
Fun way to drive a point home. God may require us to hang on a bit too long for our level of tolerance, but He's always there beside us filling our empty tank!
Blessings,
Jo
Corinne Smelker 11/15/04
Lovely story John. You describe a young boy's hunger very well!
Lucian Thompson11/15/04
John, another well written and very entertaining story from you. It sure brings back a flood of memories.
Lynda Lee Schab 11/15/04
Great story, John! To kids, they think if they don't eat NOW, they'll starve! Too bad it's not until we're much older that we truly understand how blessed we are even to be able to eat twice a day!
Well done!
Lynda
Lois Jennison Tribble11/15/04
The title drew me in, and I loved the ride. What a blessing when children recognize answered prayer and acknowledge God's provision.
DeAnna Brooks11/15/04
I remember those days when one could work on those old jalopies. Thanks for bring them back, and for showing us once again the Father's love in meeting our every need.
Mitzi Busby11/15/04
John, thanks for the journey back. Very entertaining and well written as always.
Deborah Anderson11/15/04
Nice story John. God bless you.
Debbie OConnor11/16/04
Another great story! I always enjoy your work. Wonderful tie in with hunger and the Sunday School lesson. I especially enjoyed your description of your teacher. I had a teacher with a beehive and a big purse once too.
Verlie Ruhl11/17/04
Wonderful title, and such an enjoyable story! I really liked the ending, the way the boy stepped out in faith as he understood it, and was promptly provided for.
Phyllis Inniss 11/18/04
This is so beautifully written, John. I thought of my son when he was young running his toy car on the dash board and asking what is some word that he picked up and didn't know the meaning of. But you laced your story with humour that made the telling very interesting.
Rita Garcia11/18/04
John, WOW! loved every line, the ending is superb! Blessings, Rita
Betty Shattuck11/19/04
Thanks for your notalgic story. Takes me back a few as my Dad was always working on "jalopys". Your storytelling method is so natural and carrys the reader all the way to the end.
Linda Germain 11/19/04
John, Looking out the window at my 19 year old son as he endlessly works on that old '78 Olds-Jalopy, I am glad there are no little ones beside him ((YET)), but also pleased at how well he can put it all together and then it actually starts! Loved this story, and could remember running to keep up with my own Dad. If only all guys could appreciate how responses to sons, or the lack of them, TRULY affects them into adulthood. Very nice story. :0)


affect them forever.
Cheryl Johnson11/20/04
I enjoyed this very much. Very smooth and tight writing. You're getting a vote from me.