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Topic: Insulted (11/01/04)

TITLE: I'm a Newbie
By Rita Garcia


Ellen stormed out of the office, where she worked. She sat inside the comfort of her car, and let the tears pour. How will I ever come back here again? I have never been so humiliated, so insulted in my whole life. As she sat there feeling sorry for herself, anger began to set in. Who does she think she is, telling me that I’m a sinner and headed to hell? I have never did a thing to Ginny, in fact, I have covered for her many times, she is just plain ungrateful.

Ellen began driving home, as she walked in her door, the phone was ringing. “Hello”.

“Ellen, this is Ginny, I just want to say I’m sorry. I guess I’m not very good at witnessing. I never intended to hurt your feelings. I ‘m a newbie, just, last month I attended a service with my friend at her church. I was so overcome with the Spirit of the Lord in that church, I gave my heart to Jesus, right on the spot.”

“You may have given your heart to Jesus, or whatever, but that doesn’t give you the right to judge my life.”

“I know that Ellen, I just said everything all wrong. Will you, please forgive me?”

“Ginny, it just isn’t that simple. I don’t know if I can get past your thinking, I’m headed to hell.”

“Oh, Ellen, I never intended to give you that idea, I have no right to judge you. I have found a peace in Jesus, and I just want to share it with everyone. I have never felt a love such as this, a love that forgave me of all my sins. He cleansed me, and gave me a brand new life in Him. I was born again, Ellen! For the first time in my life I feel free.”

“Wow, Ginny, that is really something. I don’t think I quite get it, but I am in awe of your feeling that way.”

“You know Ellen, maybe you would like to go to church with me. There is a special service tomorrow evening, with a guest speaker, I think you would enjoy it.”

“I don’t know, Ginny. I have never been to a church service.”

“I sort of know what your saying, I had not been since I was a child. You know Ellen, we don’t even have to stay long, if your not comfortable being there.”

“Well, I guess I could go.”

“You won’t be sorry, I’ll pick you up at seven, maybe we can go for coffee after.”

Ellen went to church with Ginny, she didn’t feel compelled to go forward during the altar call. But, she kept attending services. Several weeks later, as they sat through a service, after a particularly heartwarming sermon, the minister invited all those forward who needed a special touch from God. Ellen sat there with tears freely flowing. Ginny took Ellen’s hand, together they walked to the front. Ellen received Jesus into her heart that night.

Ellen couldn’t believe how wonderful she felt. She wanted everyone to know this elated feeling. She wanted to tell the world, to share her personal testimony, how He gave her reason to hope.

She said our loud, only her cat, Baby Andrews, was there to listen. “I think what my Mom always said is true, Baby, you can catch more bee’s with honey.”

Dear God, please give me wisdom to drawn others to You. Don’t let me be offensive, help me show only Your love.

As she gave Baby a good tummy rub, she picked up the phone to call her friend, Sonja.

Member Comments
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DeAnna Brooks11/08/04
Rita, thanks for the piece. With forgiveness of sins a new freedom flows. And may the Lord grant each of us wisdom as we share the wonder of His salvation with a needy world.
darlene hight11/08/04
Loved this!I really enjoyed the humanity of it. The falling on her face the first time she witnessed to the drawing by simply sharing what happened to her.Great entry!
Lucian Thompson11/08/04
Rita, I loved this story. Who wouldn’t with the great ending? The scenario is oh so true, also.
Charles Lee11/08/04
Very good, Rita! All who have ever tried to witness have probably fallen flat at some point, but oh the reward of winning one soul!
Verlie Ruhl11/08/04
I liked the way you started your story with the "insult", then pulled it around. I also appreciate Ginny's telling Ellen that she doesn't have to stay through the whole service--we need to meet people where they are, and a church service can be a pretty intimidating and alien place. Good job!
Deborah Anderson11/09/04
Good story Rita the way this turned out. God bless you.
John Hunt11/09/04
Kudos for a wonderful, well-written story. It warmed my heart.
Phyllis Inniss11/11/04
I enjoyed this article and the turnaround. Ellen has got a chance to bring others into the fold. God's work.
Linda Germain 11/11/04
Rita, you really captured the zeal of a new Christian, and the excitement of sharing the faith. This story would be a good witness in a teen magazine! Very nice.
Debbie OConnor11/13/04
I really enjoyed this story. Great message! One small technical note, you used "your" when you should have used "you're - you are" a couple of times. Very, very good!
Kenny Paul Clarkson11/13/04
Wonderful way to express a biblical princple. Well written; good dialog, etc.
Mitzi Busby11/17/04
Rita, Beautiful, touching story. God bless you, sister.
Jacquelyn Horne05/15/07
I know this is one of your earlier articles, so it has some structural error. But the content in this story is wonderful. It was so uplifting to read. So true.