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Topic: Insulted (11/01/04)

TITLE: I’ll Pray for You
By Kathleen Shelton
11/03/04

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Waiting for his grandsons’ arrival, he sat in his rocker on the front porch, gently, rhythmically, rocking back and forth. His grandson of all people going to be a preacher man, he mused to himself. He couldn’t figure it out, what had happened. He, himself didn’t believe in a so called God. A person was born, lived, then died, period.

His mind wandered back to his younger days when as a youth he had confronted one of those Christian people. Actually, there was no fight to it. No matter what he said or did to provoke the young boy, his response was always the same. “I’ll pray for you”. The worst, most insulting thing is that even then, he believed that the boy actually did. He could picture him in his minds’ eye, down on his knees, praying to some unknown, nonexistent force, to save his soul. “Humph” he muttered to himself, now, his own flesh and blood was preaching this God.

Eventually, he gave up taunting and beating up on that boy. Something about the way that kid would look at him with pity and say “I’ll pray for you” unnerved him. He remembered the last time he saw the boy. He was in the hospital, gravely ill and awoke to this kid standing by his bedside, and praying! Angrily, he demanded that the kid leave and not return. Then he almost choked when he remembered what the boy said upon departing. “Someday, your own children and their children will pray for you. Until then, I’ll pray for you”

He was glad that the kid could not see the twist of fate that befell him. Goodness gracious, but, wouldn’t he get a good laugh if he knew that his own son and now grandson did indeed worship the same so called God.

The sound of a car pulling up in the drive brought him back to the present. Someone was in the car with his grandson, a pretty young gal. “Grandpa, I want you to meet my future wife”, his grandson beamed. Something seemed vaguely familiar about that girl, but, he couldn’t quite put his finger upon what it was.

The girl was nice enough, but something about her demeanor that unsettled him. Something about her reminded him of that kid so many years ago. Maybe it was just because of his thoughts earlier. The afternoon passed swiftly, and soon it was time for the two young kids to leave. Upon leaving, the young girl bent over, kissed the old man on his cheek and whispered in his ear, “I’ll pray for you”.


Kathleen Ann Shelton


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DeAnna Brooks11/08/04
Wow!!! Imagine, Kathleen, if the world were truly the receipient of the genuine insult "I'll pray for you!!!" I can't even imagine what that world would look like. Can you? Maybe we ought to give it a concerted try. I know if we do, if we're faithful at it, we won't recognize the world any more.
Thank you for this beautiful, provocative peice.
Corinne Smelker 11/08/04
Wonderful, clever piece of writing - I especially like the ending - very clever!
Lynda Lee Schab 11/08/04
Kathleen.
Bravo! I absolutely loved this piece. Simply mah-velous! :-)
Blessings, Lynda
Deborah Anderson11/08/04
I loved the way this ended. Good job. God bless you.
Joanne Malley11/09/04
Kathleen,
Short, sweet, to the point and very clever--as mentioned by the others.
Joanne
Debbie OConnor11/09/04
Wow! Great entry. I know people like that old man, I'm even related to a few. And I'll pray for you is about all you can say, if you're brave enough! Excellent article.
Karri Compton11/11/04
So who was the girl? The praying boy's sister maybe? I really wanted to read more of this. Nice story! God bless.
Kathleen Shelton11/11/04
Karri-Maybe the other mans granddaughter?-Kathleen
Lois Jennison Tribble11/12/04
Wonderful, Kathleen! Moving story brilliantly executed with the perfect twist, so thinly veiling God's perfect answers to prayer.
Rita Garcia11/12/04
Kathleen, very creative, great entry. love it! "I'll pray for you." Blessings, Rita
Melanie Kerr 11/14/04
I wonder how my pupils at school, who really wind me up, would respond if I just told them I was praying for them! How things would change if I just did consistently prsy for them!