Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Four Ways For A Christian Writer To Win A Publishing Package HERE



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry
Topic: Insulted (11/01/04)

TITLE: The Wall
By bobbi richardson
11/03/04

 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 SEND ARTICLE TO A FRIEND

A lone figure approaches the barred gate. Raising a fist, he pounds on the imposing wooden structure. He takes a step back anticipating the sound of metal sliding against wood. Only silence greets him.

He steps back further and looks up. The wall is high and thick. The gate is shut tight. It’s his fault. He has to get in.

If he can get inside he’s willing to do whatever it takes to make everything right again.

The gate towers above him. The wall stretches as far as he can see on both sides. How could this have happened so quickly? It was so unintentional.

He pounds again and is again answered with silence from within.

“I’m your friend,” he cries. “Open up. Let’s talk.” He stares at the gate as if he can make it open by sheer will.

“Please let me in. You know me. We’ve been friends for a long time. Please.”

In dismay he paces in front of the gate and finally assaults it with both fists yelling, “I’m sorry I insulted you. I didn’t mean to offend you. Don’t you remember the fellowship we’ve shared? Please open the gate.”

But the gate remains closed. The wall is too high. He cannot get in.

Desperately he tries again and again. He will not give up. He must breach the wall he has erected with his thoughtless words.

Proverbs 18:19


Member Comments
Member Date
Joanne Malley11/08/04
Bobbi,
Your article says much. We should always apologize freely when offending another. Hopefully, it's something we won't have to do often. Thanks for sharing.
Joanne
DeAnna Brooks11/08/04
I hate walls...and I'm way too good at building them. Thanks for the reminder that a wall can be breeched, and even torn down. And those same stones, once used to separate, can be used to build something beautiful. God bless.
Lynda Lee Schab 11/08/04
Bobbi,
So much said with only a few words! That is pretty much the moral of your story too. Life & death is in the power of the tongue. We have no idea of how our words impact the people we speak to and many times we don't realize we've offended someone at all. What a great reminder to think before we speak (something that's so hard to do sometimes)
Great job.
Lynda
P.S. I think my comments were longer than your article! Sorry for being so long-winded! Whew, I'm out of breath!
Debbie OConnor11/08/04
Short, strong and meaningful. I like it!
Deborah Anderson11/08/04
Excellent message here Bobbi. God bless you.
Mary Elder-Criss11/09/04
Built more than a few walls my own self in my life, and have been the contributor to others. Yes, indeed, the power of the tongue is life and death. Very well written , short, concise and to the point.
darlene hight11/09/04
Great twist on the topic.Well done!
Lois Jennison Tribble11/11/04
Excellent, Bobbi. A very dramatic portrayal of the verse, " A brother offended is harder to be won than a strong city: and their contentions are like the bars of a castle."
(Prov. 18:19 KJV) Powerfully, yet simply written with a unique approach.

Charles Lee11/11/04
Many times I wished I could reach out and grab the words spoken from my mouth before they reached the hearer's ears. Could have avoided many walls with this ability.
Enjoyed.
Chuck
Melanie Kerr 11/13/04
You created a very powerful picture. I should make me think before I speak. I don't want to errect walls between me and other people.