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Topic: Satisfied (10/11/04)

By Anthony David


Raul was hungry. He let off a loud howl. Within minutes, he smelt the presence of his mother. As she cradled him in her lap, Raul eagerly sought and found her breast. Mouth clasping the nipple all in a flurry, Raul began to suckle.

As the reassuring sweet milk poured in, he relaxed. Finally, his little tummy stretched and full, he sleepily let go the nipple. Mummy put him on her shoulder. Raul let out a satisfied burp and went off to sleep.
Raul was four months old.

* * * * * * *

“Daddy, I want that green kite”, yelled Raul. He and his dad were in the market. Kites of various colors and patterns were displayed in the little shop. “Sure son, I’ll buy it for you.” Said dad as he moved forward to pay for the kite.

Raul played the whole day with his kite. He put a little tail on it and kept running and trying to make it fly, as high as he could. Late in the night, he lay exhausted on his little bed. But close to him, he kept his kite. He was fully satisfied.

Raul was four years old.

* * * * * * *

“ I am sure there are a few of you who are wondering if this is all there is to life. It is to you that this word is intended. What you need to do is simple. You need to turn from you sins, repent, and ask the Lord Jesus to come into your hearts. Then you will be free from the burden of sin and be fully satisfied.”

‘This man of God is surely speaking to me’, thought Raul as he sat in the Youth Camp, ‘How does he know of the dissatisfaction I have in my heart? I surely need the Lord Jesus Christ.’

Raul responded to the altar call. He knelt down there and repented of all his sins. He invited the Lord Jesus Christ to enter into his heart. A sense of joy and peace engulfed Raul that evening. He felt satisfied.
Raul was fourteen years old.

* * * * * * *

Thoroughly satisfied with his performance, Raul stepped out of the interview. He knew he was going to get this job. This was the third interview he attended after he finished his professional course with laurels. He wanted a job where he will be well paid, and also have job satisfaction.

Weeks later he joined in the job and began working earnestly. They gave him all the perks and pay he wanted. Satisfied, he began to slowly go up the career ladder.

Raul was twenty-four years old.

* * * * * * *

One morning after Church, he accosted Dora. He had been watching her for many months now, and knew quite a bit about her. Over coffee, he suddenly told her, “Dora, I think I am in love with you. What do say, shall we get married?” With a twinkle in her eye Dora replied, “That’s exactly what I was thinking too Raul. But why don’t we pray and seek the blessings of elders too?”

All went well and soon they were happily married, a satisfied and content couple.

Raul was twenty-eight.

* * * * * * *

Years passed. They had two lively children whom they carefully brought up. The kids too grew up and completed their studies.
One evening they all had a good time together. They spent time praising God and praying together. As they were about to start eating, something spectacular happened!

They all felt strange. It was as though they had been suddenly transformed. They felt so light and began floating up towards heaven. They heard the trumpet sound and rushed on, to meet their Lord. They had been raptured!

“What a great sense of satisfaction, to go with all my loved ones to be with the Lord,” thought Raul fleetingly as he was rushing up.
He was fifty-four.

* * * * * * *

© 2004: Dr.M.A.David S Kumar.

Member Comments
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Dori Knight10/19/04
raul seems to have had a great life, from beginning to end. good job! blessings ~ dori
Phyllis Inniss10/20/04
Raul seems to have always been satisfied. Is it any wonder he met such a rapturous end.
Dave Wagner10/20/04
You had me until the end. Then I made this face --> O_o?

In all seriousness, you have a nice style. I like how you broke up your paragraphs with the lines of asterisks...it's a little touch, but it makes it easier to read. You are a solid writer, and I appreciate the effort that you put into this piece. Thanks for posting it.
darlene hight10/23/04
Could life ever be that uneventful? I enjoyed that he seemed to be content with what he had and I like the style you used but i have to confess it felt too good to be real or true.
Anthony David10/24/04
I agree with you Darlene, I also felt it to be a little trite and too good. But then...
Rita Garcia10/24/04
Like your writing style, great entry. Blessings, Rita