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Topic: Pets (09/13/04)

TITLE: A Rodent's Rant
By Melanie Kerr
09/14/04

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What are you looking at, lady? What is it about gerbils curled up in little balls that you just have to come over and look?

And before you say, "Isn't he cute?" you should know some things about me.

I am not cute! I am a rodent. I may not be a big ugly rat or a furry little mouse but I am still a rodent. It's all about perspective, lady! If I were running about your house and raiding your larder, you can bet I wouldn't be in a cage like this with a multi-coloured plastic wheel and a water bottle. We both know, lady, I would have my tail stuck in a mousetrap, or maybe even my neck.

This is not supposed to be how my life is. I am supposed to be in some desert, down some hole in the sand, dozing in the heat of the day. I am supposed to be surrounded by family. Soft warm bodies close to mine. I am supposed to be outside at night, bathed in moonlight, foraging for food, dodging owls and eagles.

Cages! You would be the first to complain if someone stuck you in one. I have seen it all looking out of the window of the pet shop through my bars. The placards you wave and the protests you make. Maybe I can't read what is on the banner, but I know that you value freedom. You value it so much for yourself, but what about the freedom of others?

You think that because you are bigger than me that gives you the right to dictate how I should live. Just because you are more powerful than me does that give you the right to subdue me? You don't know what's best for me. You may think you are the pinnacle of God's creation but don't forget that you are accountable for how you treat me. I might not have a soul, and that's debatable, but God cares for me too you know. I may not be a sparrow, but I am one of his little creatures.

I shouldn't be surprised. I see you do much worse things to your own species. I see the homeless man that sleeps in the doorway of the pet shop. I see the looks of disgust on some of your faces as you pass him by. I see the man in the posh suit, clutching the wallet stuffed full of money. He looks the other way when the lady with the money box, collecting for neglected children in poorer countries, rattles it in his ear. I hear the way you speak to one another. Even rats display better manners. If you don't know how to show respect to your own kind, what chance do the rest of us have?

I guess I shouldn't complain. At least I have lots of dry sawdust to dig around in and plenty of food to eat.

Lady, if I were you, I wouldn't put your hand in my cage. I just might bite it. I don't need your cuddles. I don't want to be stroked. I just want some respect. Is that too much to ask for?


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darlene hight09/20/04
Nice job Melanie! I'm not sure how I feel about being lectured by a rodent but I have to admit that he made some good points.
Teresa Lee Rainey09/20/04
Melanie, you did a great job of bringing that rodent to life in yuor story. I could just picture this rat standing up, hand-to-hip, and letting me have it!
Lynda Lee Schab 09/20/04
Melanie,
I really enjoyed this! I loved the title and you certainly brought that little rodent to life!
Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Marina Rojas 09/20/04
I wanted to go get Rodney Dangerfield, put up my dukes and demand some respect for the little rodent rat-cousin thingie there!

This was fun!
Glenn A. Hascall09/21/04
I'm imagining a rodent with a vest, a cigar and a derby. Possibly once was a prize fighter - now a coach - just trying to get "Rocky the Rat" in shape for the next big match. He probably drinks three raw eggs each morning and lifts the hampster wheel to stay buff. I'm stayin' away from his cage. When he rants - I listen. Great Job! -- Glenn
Angie Schulte09/21/04
Great job! I have to admit that I haven't given much thought to conversations with a such a rodent, but sometimes the unexpected makes sense. I have to agree with Glen's comments, I see this real tough dude spoiling for a fight! It was something from a different perspective. I enjoyed. You certainly gave him character!
Pam Williams09/22/04
The ranting of a rodent -- well said!


   
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