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Topic: Rain (09/07/04)

TITLE: ONE DROP
By Judy East
09/07/04

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Setting in my kitchen looking out may bay window at the rain falling down to the earth. As I do quite often working on my computer. Putting my thoughts and feeling to words. I could not help too think, life is like the rain that falls to the ground.

One little drop may travel for miles before it finally makes its destination. We in our lives may travel for miles before we finally realize we have a purpose. For some it may be unyielding other times gentle, depending on ones journey.

Life gives us many opportunities to renew and grow just as the rain that falls to make the world a wonderful place to watch grow a new. We in the Lord welcome the sunshine after the rain.

With any luck, we also my help the Lord put up some rainbows for the whole world to know with the rain, the rainbows will follow as well as Gods love. One drop from the well of life can transform the world.


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Mary Elder-Criss09/13/04
Judy,

I really like the analogy that you used comparing how long it takes one drop of rain to fall and reach its destination, to a person finding their purpose in life. I think you have some really good ideas in this piece to share. However, your writing style is a little choppy, and fragmented. A couple of sentences could have been combined into one to make the piece more powerful, such as

"Setting in my kitchen looking out may bay window at the rain falling down to the earth. As I do quite often working on my computer. Putting my thoughts and feeling to words.”

Perhaps if you would reword it to read something like the following, it would be make a bigger impact.

“I sit at my kitchen table, pecking away at the keyboard, watching the rain, as I put my thoughts and feelings into words.”

You also have a couple of misspelled words in your piece that your computer would not pick up on, such as,"may" for "my" in your first paragraph, “a new” which, I am assuming you meant “anew”, and “my” in the last paragraph, which I think you meant to use “may” for. The most important thing I can share with you is to read your piece aloud to yourself before submitting, or have someone else read it. That way, you can catch small glitches that prevent your piece from shining!

Wishing you blessings as you write for Him!
Mary
Kenny Paul Clarkson09/13/04
Judy,

You got me thinking (an accomplishment in itself.) Like a rain drop we go through cycles; sometimes there's a rainbow, sometimes there's a storm. The spiritual implications are inexhaustible.

I hope some preachers read this. I would make a great premise for a sermon.
darlene hight09/13/04
Yes the travels of a rain drop very compelling idea.
Teresa Lee Rainey09/13/04
I like the idea in your last line about one drop changing the world. Thought provoking.
God Bless,
Teresa
Melanie Kerr 09/14/04
I would love to have a house that has a bay window. It is good that we can learn so much from nature. A short reflective piece. There are one or two typos to deal with.
Annette Bury09/15/04
You really gave me a new perspective on rain!
L.M. Lee09/16/04
great anaology, this would make a great devotional to submit.
Rose Gingerich09/18/04
Judy,
You used creativity in this analogy of rain to life. Good work. Makes you think. Has a good message. Short, but to the point. Blessings,
Rose