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Topic: The Prom (08/02/04)

TITLE: Duet
By Marina Rojas
08/04/04

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Sweating with nervous anticipation
(Will he ask me to the dance?)

Sweating bullets, chewing pencils
(Will she give me half a chance?)

Shy looks and glances towards him
(Can he see I want to go?)

What's wrong--she keeps staring at me.
(Is there something I should know?)

I hope he asks me, I hope he asks me
(Oh, please ask me! Ask me now!)

I want to ask her, I want to ask her
(But, oh my gosh, I don't know how!)

Well, here he comes, I guess Iíll say it,
(Better still, I'll drop a hint.)

She's coming at me-should I ask her?
(This thing will cost us both a mint!)

So, are you going to the prom?
(Not that I might want to go.)

The prom? I havenít given it a thought!
(Are you going? Not that I really have to know.)

So, you're not going? No one has asked you?
(Oh that's cool, it will probably be so dumb.)

Hey! What if we, you know, go together,
(Like friends ,then we could goof around there--some.)

Yeah, alright, why not? I'll see ya later.
(Hooray! He finally asked me to the prom!)

Yeah, I guess I'll see ya later, too.
(Oh no! I have to meet her Dad and Mom!)

2004©MarinaInk


Member Comments
Member Date
darlene hight08/09/04
Marina this was great! You really captured the anxiety and anticipation of the moment.
Lynda Lee Schab 08/09/04
This was great! It flowed nicely and wonderfully reflected common thoughts that likely invade most teenager's heads during "prom season". Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Joanne Malley08/09/04
Great poem...right on target for the prom!
elizabeth ritzie08/09/04
Great poem. Loved it.
Dian Moore08/09/04
The title is wonderful, and I can see this poem being played out on stage. Good job.
Carol Shaffron08/09/04
Great expression of "teen" anxieties and anticipation. You caught the reality of living life and learning how to navigate through puberty and being on the brink of young adulthood.
Melanie Kerr 08/10/04
I really enjoyed that! You eonveyed all of the tenseness behind asking.
L.M. Lee08/12/04
this was great! Loved it!
Nikita Rojas08/12/04
Very cute! You portrayed the way they felt so clearly- you're an awesome writer!
Karen Treharne08/12/04
Marina I loved the contrast between male and female interpretations of this dilemma. It was delightfully written and enjoyable to the end. Thanks for sharing.
Deborah Anderson08/13/04
Great angle, great title, and very accurate description of emotions. Thank you and God bless you.