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Topic: Fishing (06/07/04)

TITLE: Fishing with Jail Bait
By Linda Germain
06/13/04

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“Mama is gonna be so upset with you, Ollianna. You know how she feels about the length of your skirt!”

“Listen baby sister, she won’t notice if you keep your mouth shut. You think everything she says is supposed to be good for us.”

Flouncing toward the front door, she ran smack into her beautiful and Godly mother.

“I’ll be back later,” she threw over her shoulder as she tried to squeeze past her startled parent.

“Wait, before you go, Ollianna, help me take these groceries to the kitchen.”

The young girl knew she was caught. She might as well oblige and face the music. Hoping to deflect her mother’s attention, she asked about her brothers.

“This is the day your father took them all fishing. By the way, young lady, I would venture to say YOU are getting ready to go fishing yourself.”

“What do you mean? I hate those smelly things.”

Moving to the table with two glasses of lemonade and some homemade cookies, her mother indicated they would be talking.

“Sit down, Ollie.”

Rolling her eyes and heaving a teenaged sigh, she plopped down for the lecture. She had to admit her mother’s admonitions were based on truth, but she did not want to hear it again. It did not support the image she held of herself.

“You are my oldest daughter. What you do is a witness to your little sisters. It is also a reflection of the kind of girl you are.”

“But Mama, if this is about my clothes again, we simply have different ideas. It is not the same as when you were my age. Times have changed.”

Raising her voice ever so slightly, and adding a touch of maternal sternness, her mother replied, “Now you listen to me, Missy. Human nature NEVER changes. One hundred years ago girls fell in love, wanted to look pretty, hoped boys noticed them, and had to be shown the decent and righteous direction.”

Ollie began fidgeting with her uneaten cookie, generally making a mess.

Her mother continued, “ We may have more modern conveniences now, but feelings and emotions are exactly the same. You heard your father preach about this on Sunday morning.”

Ollianna put her head down but said nothing.

“ Your brothers are always discussing the ways a girl speaks volumes by her dress. She sets a standard for the way a boy behaves. Whether or not you think it is fair, females have a great responsibility when it comes to the way men act. Well, actually, Ollie, the way they re-act.”

The young woman was about to burst to share her opinion, but kept silent.

Her mother continued,” If fashion magazines keep insisting we bare more of our bodies, your great- great -grand daughters will probably wind up walking around with no clothes at all. By then, they will be desensitized to the Lord’s plan for the Godly woman, and society will be none the better for it.”

This was almost too embarrassing to hear. Ollianna was tired of listening to this straight-laced person expounding. “Oh Mother, it shouldn’t matter what I wear. This is a free country.”

“Honey, I’m trying to tell you it DOES matter. We reap what we sow and you are sowing seeds that will bring a harvest of heartache if you are not careful.”

Reaching for the Holy Scriptures on the shelf, the superior mother turned to James 1:14-15, and began to read in her quiet sweet voice.

“But every man is tempted, when he is drawn away of his own lust, and enticed. Then when lust hath conceived, it bringeth forth sin: and sin, when it is finished, bringeth forth death.”

She gently closed the Bible and looked at her daughter, expecting obedience but not demanding it.

Ollie finished the last drop of her lemonade and rose to attempt a getaway. As she began to move toward the door, her mother laid a loving hand on her arm.
“Just remember, Ollianna, Your father and I love you, and God loves you, but we do have more wisdom and knowledge about this kind of thing. Now, go to your room and make some adjustments to your outfit.”

As the thoroughly modern young woman slowly climbed the stairs to comply under pressure, her mother could hear her mumbling to herself.

“ Others have shorter skirts than this. It’s the latest style! What could it possibly hurt…it’s ONLY my ankles. After all this IS 1904!”


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Lynda Lee Schab 06/14/04
This was great! I enjoyed the story, the moral lesson, and especially the punchline! Very clever! Good job!
Lynda Schab
Corinne Smelker06/14/04
Linda!!
And here I was thinking it was 2004!

Great story - I predict you will be in the top 3 again!
Karen Treharne06/14/04
Great way with dialogue, Linda. I enjoyed this a lot as well as your other stories. Your surprise ending was the clincher...very clever.
Deborah Porter 06/15/04
Linda, how very clever! That last line really showed that there really is nothing new under the sun. Well done. You are so clever coming up with this particular angle for "fishing" and a very good title. The only thing that sounded a little odd was the description, "superior mother". It made her sound a bit haughty, although I know that wasn't your intention and she certainly wasn't. Other than that tiny personal comment, I really did
think that this was such a treat in the middle of all the fishing stories. With love, Deb
Linda Germain 06/15/04
"Superior mother" was a veiled take off of "Mother Superior".(waaay back in the dark ages, in my nursing supervisor days, my name tag said "MS". Some kiddingly asked if that is what it stood for.) Didn't mean to make her sound harsh, just strict in a loving way. :0)
L.M. Lee06/15/04
Amen! this was great! what a neat way to look at the topic...and you're right human nature never changes whether we cook over an open fire or a microwave...we still get hot and bothered!
Lynne Gaunt06/15/04
Well done! I thoroughly enjoyed this. The last line is awesome! Great job!
Donna Smith06/15/04
Have you thought about sending this to a christian teen magazine (if it doesn't win)? What an excellent message that surpasses time!
Mary Elder-Criss06/16/04
Linda, you've done it again. I SOOO look forward to your entries each week, and this piece was wonderful...I read the closing and was like ...WHAT? lol, then I had to read it again, and I had to admit what a clever lady you are..Excellent, and definitely one of my vote getters!! Blessings~Mary
Linda Miller06/16/04
Hi Linda - what a great entry. You kept my attention and great ending! You talked about a very touchy subject in a humorous, kind way. Bravo!
Melanie Kerr 06/17/04
As ever - a great entry. I liked the date bit at the end. human nature and mother's chats have not changed!
Karen O'Leary06/18/04
Interesting slant on the topic. The message is timeless. Good job.


   
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