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Topic: Beginnings (05/31/04)

TITLE: Beginnings-we have so many
By Lynda Cook
06/07/04

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Beginnings-we have so many!

In ones own life, in his life alone, there are many beginnings.

The beginning of first grade. The beginning of going to school and the excitement of buying school supplies, meeting new friends.

How about the beginning of a marriage, the beginning of being pregnant. The beginning of your
first child. The beginning of starting a new job.

In my life there is one beginning of a season in my life that I would like to mention that set a course or should I say a spring board that has helped me during my years and still to this day helping me.

I recall at this time in my life, I was 6 hours away from my hometown and being away from my mom and grandmother, which was security for me.

I recall my first child was about one years old and I was in my second year of marriage and
everything I felt was so new and at a standstill, wondering and concerned that I need something,
I prayed many times. This lifestyle of being newly married, in addition to a new baby was of course overwhelming to me.

New beginnings in my life and gasping for answers.

I remember uttering out..." I wish my papaw(grandfather) was still living, so I could ask him
what to do in situations". Well, I never forgot that day, because the God I learned to know, answered me and said to my heart, " I will teach you", and He proceeded to instruct me to start reading Proverbs and write notes.

Well that day thrilled my heart. I was taking a journey that I didn't know, but I knew I was going
to learn and live out what I was taught.

Through my years have I been perfect? Of course not, but I have learned so much and am still
learning.....


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L.M. Lee06/07/04
what a great memory...of the day you Began hearing from God - what a great day!
B Price06/07/04
some good points here, but some sentence stucture is needed.
Keep working and keep writing.
Dian Moore06/08/04
You are bursting with stories, I can see. As Kim said above, there could be more of a focus. I would suggest picking no more than two - and keep those two complimentary to each other. That God spoke to you and gave you advice, to me, was wonderful. I also noticed that the sentences look weird - but I'm betting you are hitting the return/enter key at the end of your word processor line instead of letting the word-wrap do its function. Try to let the word wrap make your lines wrap, then I think the problem of how your sentences look will go away.

Your title DOES say - "Beginnings-we have so many", but in a restricted word count essay, it's best to dwell on just a couple. Another approach may have been to simply list the beginnings after introducing the concept. However, if you could start the story here (edited version)I think your story would be very powerful.

I was in my second year of marriage and my first child was about one year old. I felt my life was so new, but at a standstill. I spent hours worrying, concerned I needed something, but wasn't sure what that something was.

I prayed many times, overwhelmed with my life of being newly married with a young child. I felt like a fish out of water, gasping for answers.

On one of these bleak days, I said aloud, "I wish my Papaw was still living, so I could ask him what to do in some of these situations."

I was shocked when God answered me! He said to my heart, I will teach you." He instructed me to start reading Proverbs and take notes while I was at it.

That day thrilled me, and I began a new journey without fanfare, a journey with God at my side, teaching me how to live as I was taught by His Word.

Deborah Porter 06/10/04
And aren't we all, Lynda! :-)

But wouldn't it be a sad day if we ever stopped learning and thought we knew it all? (Apart from that day when we are with the Lord in glory!) Keep writing and reading and honing your natural writing ability! I'll be looking forward to watching you grow. With love, Deb
Anthony David06/11/04
Good article. I do vibe with you!