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Topic: Beginnings (05/31/04)

TITLE: The Alpha-Omega
By Norma OGrady
06/04/04

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Everyday we face battles
About meaningless chattel
Dealing with ethics,
What is good and bad
Filled with grief and unhappiness
We appear so sad

We never pick up the sword
No time to read God's word
Tending to please the Lord
Doesn't this sound absurd

In order to win the war
We must adhere to the warrantor
He declares with certainty
His word is our guarantee

If we pray at the beginning of each day,
And remember that He's the potter, and we are the clay,
Shroud our selves in the armor of prayer,
We have His assurance, He will be there.

God's protection in our fight
Against evil He will smite
We have nothing ever to fear
For God is our commandeer

If we read His word, beginning each day
Our beginnings won't seem in disarray
Just heed His word,
And do as He said.
For you will never be misled

God begins all beginnings,
And end's all endings
He is the Alpha-Omega,
The Beginning and the End.

Copywrite Norma O'Grady 2004


Member Comments
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Dian Moore06/07/04
Well done, Norma. Poetry is not my thing, but I enjoyed this anyway.
L.M. Lee06/08/04
nice poem.
Linda Germain 06/09/04
Norma, Having read your bio, I can see a little of your LIFE education in this poem. Please continue to express yourself through writing because you, girl, have a LOT to say. No wisdom is as meaningful as that bought with the price of experience.Blessings to you.
Deborah Porter 06/09/04
Norma, I liked the poem and the message - very, very uplifting.

Structure-wise, it seemed to be a bit all over the place as far as style, which made reading it a little trickier. Unless it's an informal piece of poetry, it's good to start with a particular format and then stay with it.

Things like rhyming the first and second lines, then the third and fourth of a stanza, then switching to rhyming on the first and third, and the second and fourth. That made it very hard to get the flow and rhythm for the reader.

Then you had stanzas that had extra lines in them, which again got in the way of the reader's rhythm.

The words were good, the message was good and the feel was good. The structure just needs a bit of work. With love, Deb