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Topic: Beginnings (05/31/04)

TITLE: God's Eternal Sea...
By Juanita Pittman-Brown
05/31/04

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When we come into this life, we see a new beginning. When we go to be with Our Heavenly Father, we find our final beginning. I think it is so beautiful how God has set His creation in motion. We come to this existence and remain in His care forevermore. It is so very grand that our Heavenly Father never leaves us, He is always there for us twenty-four hours a day. He is always available, always loving, always forgiving, and all the other things for which we as parents strive to be in this life. Perfect He is in every way.

I can see life as setting sail on a sea from one shore to a far-away place to come when we have reached our intended destination. On this voyage, we have smooth seas and stormy waters to come. We have human trials, pain, and joy. We are followers, as well as rebels; but God is perfect and pure love. Also, fortunately God as our captain does have ultimate control. We are so very fortunate that Our Heavenly Father was at the beginning of our voyage, as well as at the end. How else could we as human beings ever make the voyage. He is our source and our perfect guide. Not only is our captain, He is Our Father waiting with open arms and loving-kindness when we have reached our destination. He is the one who knows us from conception to our arrival into His Heavenly presence, and we set sail once again on God's eternal sea.

I have written a poem that relates to this understanding. It is as follows, and is entitled, "Once A Child".

Once A Child

Once I was a child
Then so meek and mild...
Gently formed I was --
Intricate in every detail --
Designed by God
Before to earth
I set sail...
I thought
I could imagine
The beginning of my life --
Born in my humanness
Into this world
Of joy and strife...
Once a child --
Once a youth --
Once an adult --
Once aged in my years...
I have traversed
This world
Through happiness and tears...
Once a child
Pure in every way
Perfected as only I could be
By our Father above
To be the best of me...
Once a child --
Once a death --
Reborn into Heavenly wonder...
Forever I will be
Present with our Savior
On God's eternal sea...

copyright 2002
Juanita Pittman-Brown


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Gary Sims06/07/04
Juanita – This is a very good article. I like the way you outlined your thoughts in prose and then illustrated them with a beautiful poem. There were a couple of little errors in the prose that caused an interruption in the flow for me.

I stumbled over the phrasing “Perfect He is in every way. “ I don’t think most talk this way unless they are Jar Jar Binks. “He is perfect…” or “Perfect is He…” are a couple of other options to consider. Also, I think you left out the word ‘He’ in “Not only is our captain.”

Like I said these are minor – thank you for your imagery. It is always important to remember that God created us for eternity and that life is only one part of the journey.
Deborah Porter 06/07/04
Aww Juanita, what a beautiful poem and perfect ending. It actually brought a tear to my eye. Very precious. I liked the fact that you used both prose and poetry in your contribution. Also loved the image of life as a voyage. Beautiful work. With love, Deb

Marcell Billinghurst06/07/04
An excellent article and reminder of God's loving care for us. A very beautiful poem. Well done
Dian Moore06/07/04
Juanita - your presentation is unusual and I liked it a lot. One thing that bothered me was "so very" used a couple of times. I agree that you could have left out the paragraph introducing the poem. That would strengthen the piece, I think. Thank you for the imagery or our lives as a journey with God as our Captain.
L.M. Lee06/07/04
what a delightfully insightful poem!
Dan Blankenship 06/08/04
[It is so very grand that our Heavenly Father never leaves us, He is always there for us twenty-four hours a day. He is always available] is a little repetitive.

I think that since most of us are aware that God is omnipotent, we have to find unique ways to state it; I think a few lines could have been left out or possibly reworded.

It's not a bad article, I just think it needs a few minor changes.

God Bless.
Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

Patricia Ouellette06/13/04
Juanita, you have hit my heart. The sea is a great joy and inspiration to me as I do a lot of my plotting while sitting on the beach watching the waves roll in.

I love the way you presented your article and poem.

Dan commented on the repetiveness of this section. [It is so very grand that our Heavenly Father never leaves us, He is always there for us twenty-four hours a day. He is always available]. Stating OUR knowledge of God. I believe whatever we write should be geared toward those who know the Lord and those who don't. Yes it is repetitive, and maybe it could be written a little differently, however I feel it punctuates the essence of who and what God is for the non-believer, the seeker and for the mature Christian. It doesn't hurt to be reminded so pointedly sometimes.

Well done Juanita.

Blessings in His name