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Topic: light (05/24/04)

TITLE: Light Eternal
By Norma OGrady
05/28/04

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Man's idea of lights creation holds no validity
Man with all his scientific knowledge has just reached the height of stupidity.
Telling a convincing story assuring by argument with no real proof
Just science creation theory of warp and woof
Their idea is so uncouth
Now take heed and know the truth
When all was in the darkness God created light and called it good
Light created only as God could
As God said, "Let there be light," and there was light.
The elements did unite
The world filled with brilliant light, radiantly bright
There were no super nova explosions billions of years ago.
That what we see around us is merely the product of coincidence
Undeniably false, the big bang theory we must let go.
Satan's idea to confuse mankind
Planted doubt in man's mind
God knew all along
Satan's idea to man would seem strong
See Satan has always tried to prove God wrong
But God had a plan
He sent his Son
Jesus knew in the beginning that one day he would come
For God leaves no work undone
Do not let this one fact escape your notice
Jesus is represented as a lotus
My point is simply that we have Jesus as observational evidence
That God knew the cost and spared no expense
The LORD is our light and our salvation
To Him all men must come
Praise him, come, and let us walk in the true light of the LORD
Creation light last sun to sun
True light is found in God the Son


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Gary Sims05/31/04
Norma - I am not an expert in poetry but isn't there supposed to be rhythm, cadence, meter? There doesn't seem to be any consistent pattern to this. I had difficulty reading it
Norma OGrady05/31/04
Thank you for your feed back.
I am new to faithwriters writing.
I have always wanted to write. That is why I joined faithwriters. I thought being 55 I was to old to start.
I never thought I had talent to write. Just thought I would give it a try. Nothing ventured nothing gained. I enjoy writing. I'll keep trying. With everyone helping I'll maybe write something good someday.
God bless you
Your sister in Yeshua
Norma

Deborah Porter 06/01/04
Norma, I actually liked this. Gary and I have been following each other around the challenge entries today and for the most part I've agreed with all his comments. But this time I have to say that I actually picked the flow and rhythm quite easily (and I'm very picky when it comes to poetry). It had a kind of ebb and flow to it which appealed to me. That's the wonder of writing though isn't it? Everyone's style is different and everything appeals to people in different ways. Good on you for joining FaithWriters and not believing that you're too old to start! You're just beginning! The best is yet to come. With love, Deb
Mary Elder-Criss06/01/04
I particularly enjoyed your closing stanzas here, "That God knew the cost and spared no expense
The LORD is our light and our salvation
To Him all men must come
Praise him, come, and let us walk in the true light of the LORD
Creation light last sun to sun
True light is found in God the Son" Welcome to Faithwriters and good for you to follow your dream. If you could only read some of my earliest attempts...Ugh, ha ha..not that I have attained, but still pressing forwards. Thanks for sharing with us. Blessings as you write for Him~Mary
Gary Sims06/01/04
Norma - I apologize about my earlier comments...I probably should have left it at "I am no expert."

Deb's comments are much more constructive than mine. Listen to her's and ignore mine - but most importantly - keep writing. Gary
L.M. Lee06/02/04
nice way to present profound information. easy statements, easy to read.
Annette Agnello06/02/04
From the standpoint of poetry I liked the piece. It was well done. From the presentation of the subject matter it disturbs me. You are to be commended for fulfilling the rules of the contest. 300+ words can be hard for a poem, only you and one other so far has done it. Good luck in the contest.
Linda Miller06/02/04
Norma - I am new to writing too and enjoyed this writing very much. Keep up the good work and don't be discouraged. You are doing wonderful!
Linda Germain 06/02/04
Oh, please don't stop! There are so many here in the FW family who will share and mentor and encourage. You are absolutely on the right track. Am looking forward to your submission on "beginnings" :0) Blessings, LCg
Lynne Gaunt06/04/04
I thought your poem was quite good. I liked how you began at The Beginning ended with a glorious image of the radiant Son of God. When I write poetry I find that reading it out loud helps me to smooth out some of the rough spots. You might re-visit this piece after a few days or weeks and polish a bit. Keep writing!
Julie Pisacane06/06/04
Amen!. Truth and beauty revealed in this creative ,poetic piece. Thank you , Norma. You have written for the glory of God and with God moving your hand. It doesn't get better than that. In Christ, Julie