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Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: Lions and Tigers and Bears
By Deborah Steinman
05/23/04

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Lions and Tigers and Bears


In the small farming community in Wisconsin where I grew up, there were deep and dark woods full of paths originally used by the Native Americans who once lived there. I was full of imagination and a sense of adventure as a young girl, so I fearlessly explored each new path with a sense of excitement and expectation. Now, as an adult, Iíve been conditioned to fear the unknown paths in my life. Even as a Christian I find myself full of fears and worries about my life. Iíve been taught the Bible tells us repeatedly God commands us not to worry or fear for the future because Heís constantly protecting us and caring for His own. Apparently there are more passages on this topic than any other. So my daily prayeris that the Spirit of God would fill my heart and mind with the calm fearlessness that once filled my young girlís heart. I long to walk along the paths in my life with confidence and courage.


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Norma OGrady05/24/04
To be afraid or apprehensive is instintive of the human personality. Human Frailty is very alive.
Throw Your Arms Around Me
Yeshua, use mental pictures and know that Yeshua indeed has his loving arms of protection around you!
Walk In Godís Armor!
Psalm 91 God's Umbrella of Protection
Psalm 91 is a great place to go for comfort.
My favorite verses are:
11 For he will command his angels concerning you
to guard you in all your ways;
12 they will lift you up in their hands,
so that you will not strike your foot against a stone
Yeshus bless you
Norma
B Price05/24/04
know that you are not alone, GOD is there every step of the way.
Take this story and expand on it, as I feel you are walking on that path now.
continue to write and then use this as a base for the story.
GOD BLESS
Leticia Caroccio05/25/04
This story has good bones. I would have liked to have heard about those adventures and what you learned or encountered on the same paths that our native americans once traveled on.

I agree with you regarding the fearlessness of a child and how fearful we can become as adults. Children are not as prone to fear the same we are; we know more and have seen more and I think, have learned to respect the possibilities of what can happen if we venture out of our comfort zones. Try to elaborate a little more, it was interesting. Nicely done, though.
Lynne Gaunt05/25/04
Do not fear tomorrow - God is already there!
I liked your article. If you wanted to expand it, you might begin your article by recounting some details of walking one of those paths as a child. Just a thought.
Mary Elder-Criss05/26/04
Like to read about some of the lions, tigers and bears you have faced and how you overcame them. You have a good word here, flesh it out a little more. Tell us about some of your personal tigers you have overcome. Keep writing! Blessings~Mary
L.M. Lee05/26/04
learning to walk in confidence and courage...good points.
Dian Moore05/26/04
This has a good title and caught my eye after the Bushwacking one. Good points. I would like to see this expanded into a longer piece, with an example or two to back up your theme.
Melanie Kerr 05/27/04
A reflective article that makes us all examine our fears and seek to overcome them through Christ. Sometimes we would like to paint a more positive picture of how we are, without admitting to the fears.
Patrick Whalen05/27/04
Once edited this would be a good opening for an article on Godís love, care and protection.

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* - On topic
X Ė Needs to be arranged better
X Ė This could and probably should be expanded
X Ė It has potential
Deborah Porter 05/28/04
Deborah, the titleof this was eye-catching, but it definitely needed a bit more "flesh" on the bare bones of what you've started with here. It's a good starting point, but it left the reader feeling a little cheated (we want more information - because we readers are greedy people). :-) Also, as a Christian piece of inspirational writing, it left things on too much of an uncertain and unsettling note. I loved the comparison, however, between the fearlessness of childhood with the fears of adulthood. There was so much more you could have done with that and I agree with one of the comments that to really catch the reader, it would have been wonderful to share some of the adventures that fearless girl had. Last of all, it needs some paragraphs to break it up. Readers also find it very hard to cope with blocks of print. We like to have our different thoughts broken up for us. Also, when we run things together, some of the statements we intend to be the most powerful, end up being lost in the flow. I hope you'll keep contributing. You had a great idea here and were right on the ball as far as the theme. You write well, so please keep growing and developing your skills. With love, Deb