Psalm 91:11 For he will command his angels concerning you
to guard you in all your ways;
12 they will lift you up in their hands,
so that you will not strike your foot against a stone.
may Yeshua bless you
I love your comment "messages I have tucked into your day"...This poem is lovely and meaningful...The wonder of words especially those spoken of our God
and His will and plan for our lives is so very remarkable...I could follow your thought and flow very well...
"Look around you and you will see those little messages I have tucked into your day" - what a great line! I used to tuck little messages of love and humor in my family's lunch bags, just to remind them that they are loved and being thought of. How wonderful to know that God Almighty thinks about us during the course of our day. I really enjoyed this article. Nicely done.
Again, poetry isn’t my forte so it is hard for me to comment. There is a wonderful message in here and I think with some continued effort this could be a great poem. A couple suggestions:
- For me, when I do struggle with poetry, I try to keep the word-count somewhat even from line to line
- Change the third line to: He says dear child I’ve given you today
* - No errors that I could find
* - On topic
X – My opinion…word counts/syllables should be similar from line to line
* - Decent length
X – You almost had my attention but I got thrown off track a couple times