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Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: Goliaths
By Dallas Landrum
05/20/04

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I have stepped and walked down concrete and pavement rubbled streets,
Crept cautiously among the stifling crowds of the Goliaths,
Craned my neck up high to the claustrophobic space.
They stood shoulder to shoulder,
Elbow to elbow,
Foot to foot,
Keeping the sky, sun and stars for their own viewing
Selfishly allowing me a sample of blue,
A glimpse of light,
The use of their recycled air.
I was heavy with self-preservation,
Desperately jealous of their prideful stance and advantage of the heat of the sun;
While I, barely ankle high, retched from the searing, hissing steam
Emanating from the cracks below my calloused feet.
Hopelessness, like burning blinders, kept my eyes on their cushioned feet;
Made me double over as my stomach ate itself;
Ears pounding,
My tongue in my mouth like sandpaper...

But had I known what I do now
I wouldn’t have spent my precious seconds,
Minutes,
Hours,
Brooding and stewing in my jealousy,
My mouth watering from fantasies of height and sun.

No. Not now.

Had I known—
I would have simply looked down past my bleeding feet dusted black, past the rubble, And peered deep into the cracks.
I would have noticed the glitter beneath
Of rubies, of diamonds—and all within my reach.

And I would have realized then what I know now:
In the wide spectrum beneath the heights
The giants were jealous of me.


Member Comments
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WENDY DECKER05/24/04
very nice!
Lynne Gaunt05/24/04
Good imagery! I could picture you surrounded by goliaths.
Jodie Sewall05/25/04
Profound message. The world around us has nothing to offer that even remotely compares to the wealth that we have in Jesus.

I enjoyed your poem. I enjoy having to think deeply. I want to look for the rubies and gems today. Jodie
Mary Elder-Criss05/25/04
I must admit, this was a little deep for me. Had to read through it twice to understand what you were saying. Liked the imagery it invoked. I could see the giants. Isn't it nice to know they can still be slain? Blessings~Mary
Leticia Caroccio05/26/04
Unique and interesting. Beautiful words intermingled with a powerful message of hope and victory in the Lord. I enjoyed this one very much.
L.M. Lee05/26/04
liked the way you took body parts to describe the pathway.
Deborah Porter 05/27/04
Dallas, this sounds familiar. I think I may have read it some time ago and I remember thinking at the time that it was an excellent piece of writing. Well done. With love, Deb