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Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: Lombard Street by Wendy D.


Lombard Street in San Francisco, California is the most crooked street in the country. I donít mean crooked in the figurative sense, as in a high crime place where thugs hang out on the road side waiting to rip you off. I mean itís literally crooked.

Picture a snake as it slithers down the narrow path of a mountain. Thatís what Lombard Street looks like from the top of the road.

My family and I recently drove down that street. Itís not a street you would generally travel on, unless you live there. Itís not only crooked, itís extremely steep.

We rented go-carts for the day and drove around the beautiful bay area. We accidentally came upon the infamous street and went for it. Half way down the road we saw the sign that said, NO THRU TRAFFIC.However, we were already on our way down and there was no turning back.

Needless to say, we have all found ourselves on paths we shouldnít have been on at one time or another. Perhaps we were just looking for a short cut that appeared to be less troublesome. Maybe it was a fork in the road that of course, we had to take!

Fortunately, if we find ourselves headed down the wrong path, with no u-turn available, we can change the way in which we continue to proceed.

In essence, we can quietly slither down a straight and narrow path or we can gallantly stride down Lombard Street and pray at every twist and turn that greets us.

The latter may seem risky and may even be a rough ride, but when we reach the end of the path and hear, ďWell done, good and faithful servant,Ē we will know the manner in which we chose to get there was well worth the effort.

Member Comments
Member Date
Mary Elder-Criss05/24/04
Nice piece. I liked your usage of anologies with Lombard Street and how we must pray at every turn. Blessings, Mary
Leticia Caroccio05/24/04
What a good take on the subject. It brought to light the challenges of traveling on a road that we sometimes find ourselves on. You supplied the simple formula showing how to get through and what awaits those who do make it down that path. Nicely done. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Naomi Deutekom05/24/04
Good read.
L.M. Lee05/24/04
liked the way you took an experience and saw more.
Lynne Gaunt05/24/04
Nice descriptive illustration, and good job making the application to life. Good message.
B Price05/24/04
were able to tell a story in a short story which can be good.
like how you describe the street, and how we should pray at every turn
Patrick Whalen05/25/04
This is a great take on the theme and I think would make an excellent article. In its current state it is lacking some in form and fit. Some of the sentences are short and choppy and the paragraphs need to be organized a little better. I had fun reading this though and wished I was there on my go-kart too! :)

3 of 5
X Ė A couple punctuation errors and sentence structure needs work
* - On topic
X Ė The form fits but could be better arranged
* - It was of decent length
* - I was entertained even though I learned something
Marcell Billinghurst05/26/04
I enjoyed your story. It is a very clear message of the paths we take and the choices we make.Well Done
Deborah Porter 05/26/04
Wendy, I enjoyed this very much. Good connection. Believe it or not, Lombard Street is even known here in Australia (well, at least to me) thanks to an old Bill Cosby routine. With love, Deb
Dave Wagner05/26/04
Good submission. You could have mentioned that some take wrong paths out of a sense of fun and/or adventure, like you guys did in your go-carts.

I like the analogy, and the presentation. You definitely have skills as a writer. Thanks for posting.