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Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: A LINE IN THE SAND
By Angie Ragg
05/17/04

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Remember those days when it was easy to “fit in”?
Those days are getting shorter, you need to “get in”!

Are you on the left, or are you on the right?
Are you in the middle, trying hard not to fight?

You’ll have to make a choice, Who’s the One that’s in command?
Straddling the fence won’t work, it’s time to take a stand.

Will you accept the slander about the Lord whom you love?
Will you defend and honor your Creator from above?

Are you hiding behind the mask that is transparent to the Lord?
Is your heart full of the world, or full of power from His Word?

If God said to give all you had to the fatherless and poor,
Would you save some for yourself, or would you try to give more?

Would you sacrifice your pride to preserve your faith?
Are you concerned about what man or what God thinks?

Do you love the Lord enough to even sacrifice your life?
What about your children’s? What about your wife’s?

Daily you will choose a path with every decision that you make.
There are two choices, wide or narrow, which one will you take?

Nothing on this earth should replace your love for Him.
All must come second to have true peace within.

It’s time that you decide who you will take by the hand.
Because if you look closely, there’s now a line in the sand.


©A. Ragg 1998


Member Comments
Member Date
Marcell Billinghurst05/24/04
This poem holds a very clear challenge to us all, in the choices we make each day. Will we live God's way or the ways of the world? How we respond will have eternal consequences.
Leticia Caroccio05/24/04
Good flow. Many truths spoken. Great title. I enjoyed your poem.
Patrick Whalen05/24/04
I’m not a poetry buff but wow! This was powerful, to me. There seems to be a little work to be done to perfect this piece but it is a wonderful entry!

5 of 5 – AWESOME!
* - I would take the “’s” off of children and wife
* - If this doesn’t put you on the right path, I pray for you!
* - Not sure on poetry form but this worked for me
* - Decent length, wouldn’t add or subtract
* - For poetry I was definitely entertained
B Price05/24/04
Enjoyed, it was easy reading, nice flow, and the title and the last part of it fit together well.
L.M. Lee05/24/04
I liked it! There never really is a fence, we just like to think there is!
Lynne Gaunt05/24/04
This is very good. Great title. Thought provoking. Personally, I would have liked to hear a bit about God's grace and mercy because I am one who has failed often.
Gary Sims05/25/04
I liked this a lot, especially the last line. I could just see Jesus drawing the line with his finger for you to follow.
Deborah Porter 05/26/04
Good, strong contribution Angie. The rhythm and flow felt a bit out in places, but you got the point across very well. One place though where it really throws the reader off completely and that's in the 7th stanza. You've kept it as a structured rhyming poem all the way, which has the reader flowing fairly comfortably along. Then we hit a non-rhyming stanza and the "boat" we're riding in capsizes. I know that as a general rule the message has to come before the rhyme, but not when we've set it up to rhyme throughout. Other than that, it's a very appropriate and good entry. With love, Deb