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Previous Challenge Entry
Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: A Time Apart
By Marcell Billinghurst
05/17/04

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Greetings friends,
I am a new member, and an Australian Christian Writer. This is my first entry to the weekly challenge.

So often we become so busy with our lives, we become worn out and frazzled and find it hard to cope. We need to take time out to find the path we need, to find renewal and direction in our lives. The poem I would like to share, leads us on the path to Jesus Christ, who restores our souls.

A Time Apart

Jesus tender Shepherd lead me
to a place of quiet rest,
knowing Lord that in Your wisdom
You alone for me know best.
Lead me by the quiet still waters,
gently wash away my cares,
for I know that You have heard me
and You listen to my prayers.
Wash away the sins that bind me,
You alone can make me whole,
as I wait in quiet and stillness
I pray You gently cleanse my soul.
Bring renewal and restoration,
as I spend this time with You.
A time apart to know Your leading,
show me Lord what I must do.
Help me Lord to know Your wisdom,
take my hand and show the way,
with Your love I know You’ll lead me
to a brand new brighter day.

© by Marcell Billinghurst.


Member Comments
Member Date
Mary Elder-Criss05/24/04
Very nicely done. I don't know a lot about poetry, but the words spoke to my heart. Welcome to the group and God bless you as you write for Him! ~Mary
Norma OGrady05/24/04
Welcome to the site Marcell.
I also am new to the site, this was my 6th week.
I do enjoy it.
God Bless.
Norma
Melanie Kerr 05/24/04
a beautiful poem. i reminded me of hymns I used to sing.
Donna Haug05/24/04
Marcel, I really enjoyed your poem. The beginning flowed so beautifully, you captured me. And the words ministered to me. I needed that. Thanks!
Leticia Caroccio05/24/04
Welcome. Your words were so beautiful they should be set to music. It sounds like a praise song. Very nicely done.
Patrick Whalen05/24/04
Perhaps it is because I am a man but poetry doesn’t do much for me. I did enjoy this poem for what it was but it is too “touchy-feely” for my taste. I am certain this will rank high this week.

4 of 5
* - I’m not sure about proper punctuation on poetry but no errors pop up to me
* - On topic
* - Again, not sure about poems but this form works for me
* - Seems like a proper length
X – This is nothing personal but I am not really into poetry and don’t enjoy reading it much
Glenn A. Hascall05/24/04
I do like poetry and you walked such a tender trail, I could do little but walk with you. Glad you're here - you've got one third of my vote.
Juanita Pittman-Brown05/24/04
I very much enjoyed your poem...Good work...Welcome to you...Keep writing...I do so enjoy spiritual thoughts such as you have expressed in poetic form...
B Price05/24/04
Welcome Marcell!
I'm not to much in poems either, and I am a female. but I did enjoy reading this. It flowed well, understood it well.
I liked how you stretch it to make the quote instead of being under 150 count, very clever.
Keep writing.
I hope you will join the message board as well
again welcome to FWriters.
this makes my 6th week being here
L.M. Lee05/24/04
welcome aboard and this was a lovely poem
Lynne Gaunt05/24/04
Your poem has a very comforting feel to it. Nice flow. It does remind me of an old beloved hymn. Good job.
Deborah Porter 05/26/04
Well done Marcell! Good on you for jumping in. This was so lovely and I love the "touchy-feeliness" of it. ;-) Just what I needed to read tonight. With love, Deb
gillian liversedge05/26/04
Seems that there are loads of us 'new ones' here- this is my third week! Welcome! Nice poem.
Bertie Patano05/26/04
Marcell,what a lovely prayer to our Lord. It reminds me of the style in which Longfellow wrote "The Song of Hiawatha" (1855)
Hiawatha was a Mohawk chief credited with organizing the five Indian nations in early America. Give us another poem and know you are doing well. Bertie
Dona Rae Moore05/27/04
Hi Marcell: I entered for the first time this week also. I really enjoyed your poem, it was easy to read as it had a nice rhythmn. I always marvell at people who can make words rhyme and still have such a beautiful message. Good luck in the future on your entries and God Bless:
Marcell Billinghurst05/27/04
Thank you everyone for your kind words and for making me feel welcome. I have submitted a new poem this week. In answer to your question Wayne,mostly I write rhyming poetry, and some free form poetry. I have done some voluntary editing,devotionals, prose pieces and articles. I have also written several scrpture choruses.I look forward to becoming more a part of this writing community. Keep up the good work everyone. God bless you all from Marcell
Linda Germain 05/28/04
The first thing I thought about was what a lovely song this would make. Welcome to FW. You will love it here! :0)
Marcell Billinghurst05/28/04
Thank you to all who have made comments or suggested putting this to music. I have had that idea suggested to me about another poem which you may get to read one day when it fits the theme. Unfortunately I cannot read or write music and have not yet pursued this area, except for one song which an elderly lady wrote the manuscript for many years ago. I have also made my own greeting cards on my computer for family and friends and would like to develop this commercially. God bless you all from Marcell