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Topic: Paths (05/17/04)

TITLE: THE PATH I WALK
By Jerry Lyn Luckie
05/17/04

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The Path I Walk

I sit alone in the night, the dark consumes my soul
Taking the high road is such a lonely place sometimes
When all I am and all I believe is questioned by others
Who cannot understand my heart and the depth of my soul

Making choices that I feel have been the best for my life
Yet still, being judged so harshly for a forgiving spirit
Causes me doubt and the pain leaves wretching emptiness
I need your wisdom for the past, your courage for the future

For now the foundation is being shaken of all that I am
Others that cling to hurt turned to bitterness and resentment
Threatens to destroy the spirit you have given me
Living my life with love and forgiveness at the center

The journey has been long and hard, but I know it matters
That each experience of my life has drawn me nearer to you
And I need the confidence to know I can endure the trials
So that tomorrow will be brighter because of the sacrifices

For you are the God who never leaves, my constant hope in trouble
And in each moment of suffering, I know you are working all together for good

Touch my heart with your healing hand and guide me on the path I need
To be your servant in this world, overcoming grief and despair with your love and your forgiveness—at the center of my life—my comforter, healer, refuge, friend


Member Comments
Member Date
Leticia Caroccio05/24/04
Beautiful and heartfelt. His grace in your life is evident in your words. Thank you for sharing words that encouraged me today.
Patrick Whalen05/24/04
I'm not sure what this is? Is it a prayer, a hymn...?

3 of 5
* - I didn't catch any spelling or grammar issues
* - On topic
X - I am not sure what genre this is written in
* - I'm not being mean but I am glad it ended when it did. I wanted he pain and depression to go away quickly!
X - While I can tell this is from the heart, it is not something that I wanted to read to the end because it starts out so sad.
Dona Rae Moore05/24/04
What open honesty. I enjoy free verse as it allows us to really open our souls. I felt your pain and your victory. May you continue to find peace as you share your God.
Juanita Pittman-Brown05/24/04
I can see in your poem the living of life as it truly is...This speaks well of your poem because it is not easy to express truth with meaning...I very much enjoyed your work...It is so beautiful how gifts are given by God and used so beautifully to glorify Him...
L.M. Lee05/24/04
Yes, it's hard sometimes to stay on path, when there are so many voices trying to pull us off.
Lynne Gaunt05/24/04
This is a deeply moving piece. I can feel that this journey has been painful, I pray that you have joy and peace in Jesus!
Robert Coskrey05/25/04
As a poet, one rule to
always keep in mind is
to keep the lines short
and concise. Many lines
are longer than others
throwing the whole piece
off balance. Especially
nearing the end of your
poem.

I have many poems with this problem. Many have
been redone and others
still under construction.

I think you need to revisit this poem and
shorten your lines.
Gary Sims05/25/04
I don't think we should criticize structure when a piece speaks with such emotion and truth as this.
"but we also rejoice in our sufferings, because we know that suffering produces perseverance; pereverance, character; and character, hope. And hope does not disappoint us, because God has poured out his love into our hearts by the Holy Spirit, whom he has given us." Romans 5:3-5
Deborah Porter 05/26/04
Surprised by some of the comments made. I was really moved by this piece of writing. It was quite beautiful and not depressing at all - in fact, I found it quite inspirational. With love, Deb
Phyllis Inniss 05/26/04
I like "the pain leaves wretching emptiness". There is so much feeling in this article, but you are so right - everything works together for good to them who love the Lord. Good poem.
Marcell Billinghurst05/26/04
Thank you for your poem. It is good to see how God is enabling you to keep on persevering.
He may not change your situation, but he can change the way you deal with it and draw you closer to Him. He is doing this for me. Don't Give up.Praying God will bless you through this experience
Linda Germain 05/27/04
Beautiful and touching!
Dan Blankenship 05/29/04
I enjoyed this work. Life is not always a joy, and many people do not walk with faith...it can be a struggle at times - trying to deal with worldly situations.

I think it is well-written and structured. Good job.
Bella Louise05/29/04
I love this! It is a real inspiration as many of my friends suffer badly from depression-it's a breath of fresh air. It's also (in my opinion) well written and very honest. Thankyou :)