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Topic: Pride (04/12/04)

TITLE: Pouncing Pride
By Bonnie Levesque
04/18/04

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Pouncing Pride
Struts across the open plain of man's heart.
Then
Laying in wait, gathering strength like a mighty, hurricane
It strikes
Crushing bonds, leaving for dead.

Pouncing Pride
Always knows just where to punch
Always knows just when to kick
Always knows just what to choke.
Leaving black, emptiness where there was such promise.
Such light.

Pouncing Pride
Keeps
Swirling, whirling incessantly.
As its' winds howl
Homes are broken
families torn asunder,
friends lost.

Pouncing Pride
Has entered a man's heart
Taken him down
To his gutted self
To his ruination.

Pouncing Pride
is a robber.
Robbing us
of our place
in our Father's world.

When Pouncing Pride is finally brought to its knees
Yielding
acquiescing
his way to Humble Honor in a man's heart
Our Father's World is lifted up.
And, all heaven and earth rejoice
For trully
This is my Father's world
In Humble Honor.

by Bonnie Levesque
bjleve@aol.com


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Melanie Kerr 04/19/04
I really liked your poem. I thought your choice of words was excellent. I liked the way you so clearly indicated the effect of pride on people's lives, families and their walk with God.

I liked the final verse. Pride is brought down when we yeild to God, and that is when we are lifted up.

I wasn't sure about the repeated use of the word "Pouncing". it seemed to fit the first verse well, but I am not so sure of the other verses.
Maree Paton04/19/04
Great use of words. I liked this.
L.M. Lee04/20/04
Pouncing pride reminded me of a tiger, pouncing on its prey to kill it.
Leticia Caroccio04/21/04
Beautifully written. Your use of the "pouncing" combined with pride evokes a vision of a powerful beast overpowering its prey. I especially liked the final paragraph, particularly "...humble honor in a man's heart our Father's world is lifted up..." Good job on this topic.