The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/08
Oohh, I could feel your MC slowly transforming both emotionally and physically. The ending was perfect, and not expected. Excellent.
10/26/08
An excellent story and a powerful reminder of the soldiers who serve courageously.
I could feel the emotion in this. I'm glad you left us with a ray of hope. Nice job!
Your story was developed perfectly for the wonderfully hopeful ending.
The great pace and attention to detail really draws the reader into Alex, not just into the story. Wonderful.
This one tugged at my heartstrings. I get the impression he was wounded in the war. I love how you put us into his head, and how the love of family, and celebrating Christmas with them gave him hope to try again. A testimony to the power of love. Great job.
10/29/08
Oh man, that was good. I loved it! Alex captured my heart. What a transformation at the end. I did not expect that.
Nice job!
10/30/08
Great ending line! Talk about grabbing our attention! I liked this piece very much.