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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Charade (08/14/08)
Sitting, laughing with my friends,
Merriment that never ends.
This façade can’t make amends.

Happiness is my charade.

Visions from my yesteryear,
Acting wild and drinking beer,
Living days so insincere.

Thinking ‘bout the choices made.

Losing life I can’t retrieve.
Mourning loss, but cannot grieve,
Emptiness I can’t conceive.

Pondering the life I’ve laid.

Sinking fast in my despair.
Burdens far too great to bear,
Reaching out, but no one’s there.

Loneliness, the price I’ve paid.

What I’ve sown, I now must reap,
Languid, not allowed to sleep,
Suffering, I cannot weep.

Pain is caused by this charade.

Growing bitter in my age,
Seeking wisdom from the sage,
Wishing I could turn the page.

Weary from this game I’ve played

Consequences turning dire,
Twisting, tangled in the mire,
Fearing I will face His ire.

I must end this masquerade.

On my search I now embark,
Stumbling, groping in the dark,
Praying, pleading for a spark,

Rescue me from my charade.
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Date
Betsy Markman
08/21/08
Very good message and poetic structure!
Catrina Bradley
08/23/08
I love the structure of this poem. Your message will speak to many. Nicely done.
Joanne Sher 
08/23/08
The structure is masterful, and the message so important and wonderfully presented. Very well done.
Beth LaBuff 
08/25/08
Everything about this is perfect! Your word choices and rhymes are wonderful.
LaNaye Perkins
08/25/08
Powerful, poetic, and perfect. Love this message, and I love the structure of the poem. Well done!
Yvonne Blake 
08/25/08
Wow! I love you poetic pattern. The message is so sad, but comes across clearly. Well done
Chely Roach
08/25/08
This was AWESOME! The message and the flow were spot on...I loved it!
Cheri Hardaway
08/25/08
Poignant and compelling. Praying this seeking one finds the Father... Blessings, Cheri
Sharlyn Guthrie
08/26/08
Wonderful, well-written poem. It seems honest and heart-felt, too.
Leah Nichols 
08/26/08
I like the poem structure, and the message reads clearly.
Leah Nichols 
08/26/08
I like the poem structure, and the message reads clearly.
Joanney Uthe 
08/26/08
"Happiness is my charade."

Oh,how many of us have lived this line. Great poem.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
08/26/08
What a sad facade you've pictured in your poem. I like the structure. Very well done.
Betty Castleberry
08/27/08
I like this format. You are right on topic, too. Great rhyme. Well done.
Joy Faire Stewart
08/27/08
This is my favorite stanza..."Sinking fast in my despair. Burdens far too great to bear, Reaching out, but no one's there." Beautiful job capturing emotions.
LauraLee Shaw
08/27/08
This is brilliant. These lines especially stand out:
Loneliness, the price I’ve paid.

What I’ve sown, I now must reap,
Languid, not allowed to sleep,
Suffering, I cannot weep.

Pain is caused by this charade.
Heather Sargent
08/28/08
Fantastic! I love this, you have absolutely captured the depth of the sorrow we can feel when we look in the mirror and take off the mask. Well done!
Kate Grey
01/01/09
Beatiful. Everything works together in the expression, just as excellent poetry should.