The Official Writing Challenge
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The most incredible thing happened to me while I read this entry.... I began to feel motion sick! I quite liked the way you started with a point and grew from that point until about halfway through, but then I lost track of your thought process, but I did feel sick, so perhaps that is my fault not yours. Except that the reason I felt sick was the physical appearance of the writing - how weird is that! Write well.
06/09/06
Great truths in here, but I'm not sure they are communicated at their best in this way, where they are densley packed together. Also, I didn't understand this line 'Is knowing that They are without each and individual as I AM.' - but perhaps that's just me. Thank you for reminding me of the peace that comes form knowing that I am part of GOd's great plan.
06/15/06
I enjoyed the truths you have in this, and suggest that reading it would have been much easier if you had put them into a format like this:

Personal Peace

Is knowing
with certainty
that there is life
after death,
that there truly is
God’s wonderful plan
for my
existence,
that God’s heart encompasses all
my sorrow,
pain, and
suffering.