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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Purposefulness (Purpose in Life) (05/25/06)

TITLE: The Sentinel
By Kenn Allan
05/30/06


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Shaped of stone by godly hands,
And filled with ancient seas,
A tiny cove which time forgot,
Sleeps in the ocean breeze.

A single pylon driven deep,
Into the bed of rock,
Survives the decomposing fate,
Bestowed upon the dock.

High atop his weathered throne,
Beyond the briny reach,
A pelican keeps careful watch,
Over his strand of beach.

He sits in contemplative thought,
In daybreak's golden haze,
Until the sun creeps from the sky,
And sets the sea ablaze.

High overhead in circled swarm,
The seagulls rule the skies,
Disrupting any hope of peace,
With echoes of their cries.

They trip the air in perfect light,
Yet curse his watchful eye,
They ridicule his sagging bill,
Without a reason why.

They scorn the curve within his neck,
And mock his gait with glee;
The pelican just turns away,
And gazes out to sea.

One careless day, a haughty gull,
While swooping to deride,
Misjudges with a glancing blow,
Against the pylon’s side.

Cruel barnacles like rusty nails,
Slice deep into his flesh,
Depriving wings of precious flight,
And oozing life afresh.

Spreading fast, a crimson stain,
Lures death from far beneath;
No mercy comes from dorsal fin,
Or rows of slashing teeth.

In knowing precious time is short,
The gull makes his retreat,
Propelled by terror in his heart,
Sustained by thrashing feet.

Beyond the cove salvation waits,
Where breakers rush to shore;
A somber bell tolls loud and clear,
Above the ocean’s roar.

With ebbing strength, the fleeing bird,
Put stinging wounds aside,
To reach out for that blessed sound,
And to his fate abide.

It is a buoy which beckons true,
A guidepost for the lost,
Its chain secured by shipwrecked souls,
Whose deeds reflect the cost.

By force of will, he dares ascend,
Beneath the pointed spire,
Expecting hope from whom he flew,
To bring what he'd require.

But members of his former flock,
Have chosen to betray;
They circle high above his head
And look the other way.

The pelican, from distant shore,
Has watched the tale unfold;
He saw the gull escape the sea,
And tremble in the cold.

The great white shadow lurking near,
From him is not concealed,
Nor is the glimmer of the blood,
From gashes not yet healed.

No longer can his purpose wait,
To heal the seagull's plight;
He stretches forth enormous wings,
And lifts himself in flight.

Set free from boundaries of the earth,
He soars with awesome grace,
Transcending all expected laws,
Which govern time and space.

Now he plunges from the heights,
In streaks of brown and gray,
Keen vision focused with intent,
Upon his fishy prey.

He hits the water near the shark,
His snakelike neck unfurls,
Four dozen minnows disappear,
Amid the foamy swirls.

Once safely in the air again,
Away from vengeful jaws,
The pelican heads for the buoy,
To seal his noble cause.

Unseen by the unconscious gull,
The pelican arrives,
And dumps life from his sagging bill,
Ensuring he survives.

Departing quickly as he came,
He leaves without farewell,
Except the rocking of the buoy,
And tolling of the bell.

Then in the skies above the cove,
A pelican flies free,
Still gazing at that azure line,
Where heaven meets the sea.


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Venice Kichura06/02/06
This is sooo beautiful! You have such an anointed gift for poetry!
Jessica Schmit06/02/06
what's this! Second day and you only have one commnet! Call someone, anyone!!!! What's wrong? Well, nothing's wrong with this piece. beautiful. A modern day parable. Beautifully written. Almost made me cry. I'm an animal lover. Great words. Everything seemed to belong. Great message. I think you hit all the points. Should score extremely high, but that's not a surprise! Your writing is extremely obvious (that's a great thing!)
Debra Brand06/03/06
Fantastic! Such eloquence of pen and prose. You must live by the beach. Very deserving of accolades. God has indeed blessed.
Brenda Craig06/04/06
Absolutely captivating, I write poetry (preschool) compared to this. I love every one you write. Even though I write poetry, I am not overly fond of reading poetry. Yours is the exception in every way. I went and most of them, will catch the rest later. A wonderful and beautiful gift. Blessings
Jan Ackerson 06/04/06
This is gorgeous! I love that your rhymes are so beautifully unforced, and your rhythm suggests the rhythms of the waves. And the story put a big 'ol lump in my throat when I realized where you were going.
Maxx .06/04/06
Yet another week where the author calls his piece bad only to have it win? Time will tell. Personally I think you are a victim of your own success ... you generate such high levels of expectations for everything that you do ... it's a wholelot to live up to. I read this and subconsciously compare it against your classics of the past. I personally don't think it measures up to some of them. But, then again, it doesn't have to! It only has to measure up to the other pieces of this week. And that's in the hands of the judges ... the results stored in a mayonaise jar on Funk and Wagnel's fornt porch. (or however that old Karnack line went!) Good luck and great writing.
Rachel Rudd06/05/06
Beautifully written! Can't you teach us how to write poetry like this? Well, I guess not since it's a God-given gift. :):) Wonderful!
James Clem 06/05/06
Nice job Kenn--as usual. I wondered if you would return to your trademark style. My attempts at this style of writing have so far been um... well, you make it look so easy.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz06/06/06
Beautiful as always. I love it.
Dara Sorensen06/06/06
Amazing! So creative too; I never would have thought of something like this. You are a true literary master!
Suzanne R06/07/06
Magnificent ... of course!

Just a silly little comment.... If the injured gull is sitting unconscious on the buoy and doesn't hear the pelican come, where does the pelican put those minnows? Next to him? Are buoys big enough for that?

A tiny little criticism that probably only reflects my lack of understanding about what buoys look like. Overall, brilliant work, as always.
Sherry Wendling06/08/06
Congratulations, Ken! Your poetry always takes me places. This time it was my beloved northern Atlantic, where that "azure line" has mesmerized and beckoned countless times. Great story in verse!
Sally Hanan06/08/06
Another good job - not as stellar as Lucinda Druell maybe, but very good all the same. I'd encourage you to try out a writing piece that is more like prose next week. You obviously have the poetic gift, but, like Jessica, I think you could use the poetic and put it into a fictional story and do very well with it.


   
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