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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)

TITLE: A Lifted Veil
By Debbie OConnor
05/01/06


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Dear Kathryn,

From the beginning, I dreamed of you. Your sea green eyes, wild red curls and the freckles you loathe were my vision. I sang your laugh, placed the dimple in your left cheek, and fashioned the fiery spirit that is your blessing and bane.

As I set in motion all things necessary to bring my dream to fruition, I foresaw all that would happen to keep us apart. Sin begets death. I could not bear to lose you, and I would not force you to be mine. Your forefathers’ sin ensured you would be born in bondage. I searched the earth from the beginning to the end of time and there was no one righteous; not one who could free you and the rest of my children from enslavement.

Therefore, I came myself. I became a man. I was tempted in every way just as you are, but remained sinless so that I could die in your place. Your emerald eyes swam with tears in my mind as Roman guards spit on me and mocked my pain. I heard you singing my praises as the scourging ripped the skin from my back. My vision of you held me to the cross more firmly than the nails. I would not deny you the opportunity to live. I would not deny myself your love.

At the perfect moment in time, I placed you on earth. I gave you water, air, food and family. I lavished love and care upon you, eagerly awaiting the day you would return it.

It was a mere second, and an eternity. I sought you tirelessly, bringing my children across your path to point you toward me. Spring breezes called your name, birds sang of my love, and every delight was a gift from me to you.

You were a foolish, headstrong child, but I loved you. You made choices that could have cost you all, but for my protection and patience. I turned them into signposts to show you the way.

One day, a beloved friend led you to me, as a father leads his daughter to her groom. You received my love with joy, and agreed to be my bride. Oh, I delighted in you that day. Your ecstasy was but a shadow of my own. There is no greater joy than to love, requited.

For the next several months, we were inseparable. You thought of me continually, pouring your hopes out in prayer. You dreamed of my love, my touch. You lived to know and serve me. You talked about me to all who would listen.

The day you publicly acknowledged I am your Savior shines in eternity. Like a bride, you came before the world and called me Lord and Husband. You died to self, submerged in water, and rose from that water into new life with me.

You grew more beautiful and confident daily in my presence. You were fruitful, serving your family, church, friends and neighbors with joy. When you were weak, I was your strength. When you suffered, I was your comfort. You did more than you ever dreamed possible, because I lived through you. With me, all things are possible.

At times, life’s struggles and blessings distracted you, causing you to feel cold and alone. You forgot that I would never leave and cried with longing, while I hovered, equally yearning to satisfy. You are mine. I will not share you with idols.

Gradually, your sun-kissed hair became a garland of silver. Time, fear, and loss etched creases in your skin. I know and cherish them all.

These later years have been most precious to me. As your body became feeble, your spirit grew strong. While you felt most worn and useless, the lonely hours you filled with prayer moved mountains.

Now you are a golden chalice at rest in my hand, always at my service. It is time. As I lift your veil, you will know me fully.

Come home, my bride.


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Caitlynn Lowe05/04/06
Amazing! I got goosebumps just reading it! Well done.
Cheri Hardaway 05/04/06
I was reduced to tears as I read this lovely account of a Father's love for His child, a Groom's love for His bride, my Father's love for me. Awesome job! Cheri
Jan Ackerson 05/04/06
Wow...just wow. This builds to one of the most beautiful climaxes I've ever read, with the lifting of the veil and the final "Come home." Wow.
Anita Neuman05/04/06
I've just sat here for way too long trying to think of how I can convey to you what a beautiful letter this is. And I just can't find adequate words. This is love, so pure, so personal, so perfect. Thank you, and bless you, for penning this exquisite letter.
Crista Darr05/05/06
Okay, you've moved me to tears too. This could only be written by the power and grace of the Holy Spirit in you! It is the ultimate love letter, the perfection of intimacy. Beautiful!
Suzanne R05/08/06
Just gorgeous. Well done.
Pat Guy 05/08/06
This - is - exquisite! Awesome and powerful. Too beautiful for words.
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/08/06
Beautiful. This is wonderful.
Debbie Sickler05/08/06
Wow. I loved this. Such a personal way to express how much God loves and cares for us as individuals. I loved the line, "My vision of you held me to the cross more firmly than the nails." Beautiful and touching. Great job.
Joanne Malley05/08/06
Awesome writing. Deserves high accolades! I absolutely loved the end. Jo
Maxx .05/08/06
I loved the beginning and the ending ... wow to the ending. Great work there. I think you will score quite well with this. I felt the middle was just a bit squishy... could have been refined a touch more... maybe pulled out a few lines. But, I doubt that will hurt you much. You've captured a world of emotions here and stoked the hope of us all. Great job!
T. F. Chezum05/09/06
Touching and well written. Very good job.
Lynda Lee Schab 05/09/06
Magnificent! A beautiful love letter from God - perfect entry for "Love." A definite contender this week. Simply wonderful.
Ann Grover05/09/06
Beautiful!
Melanie Kerr 05/09/06
You got the name wrong at the beginning - it should have read "Dear Melanie". I would like to print this off and fold it into the pages of my Bible. Well written and very touching.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/09/06
What beautiful imagery. Beautifully done. Thank you.
Rachel Rudd05/09/06
Wonderful Writing! When I read the title I imagined a wedding story...and that's definitely what it is! The intimacy and love portrayed here are excellent. I love the ending, too!
Purity Snowe05/09/06
So sweet.. brought a lump to my throat! Wow!
Rita Garcia05/09/06
A masterpiece at its finest!
Carla Feagans05/11/06
Simply beautiful. I don't know what else I can say that hasn't already been said in the comments, but I need to go wipe my tears and blow my nose anyway.

WELL DESERVED WIN. Just stunning.
Trina Courtenay05/11/06
Debbie, this was simply beautiful, from begining to end. I loved it! Congrats!
Lois Jennison Tribble05/15/06
Impressive! In complete control, you snared me immediately and played me like a yo-yo master: spinning out into eternity, then up-close-and-personal with the shared intimacy glimpsed through a bridal veil, then back again to the eternal. This piece connects and evokes personal feeling, transmitted with truth and beauty. Congratulations, Debbie. I am so proud of you!

Jan Ackerson 04/18/09
Debbie, I love this entry, and I'm going to feature it in the Front Page Showcase for the week of May 4th. Look for it on the FaithWriters home page, and congratulations!
Connie Allen05/03/09
This is such a beautiful writing and so very true showing God's love for each of us individually and collectively (the Church-his bride)....This is a well deserved winner. I loved it.
Vanessa Peters05/06/09
what a beautiful piece, that brought tears to my eyes this afternoon. it made me think of my grandmother.


   
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