The Official Writing Challenge
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Perhaps it's just me, but the transition in Abby's feelings seems unrealistically quick to me. I grant, though, that it is not easy to accomplish major shifts easily in 750 words.
06/10/16
I agree that I don’t think you had enough space to do this story justice. Maybe if you left out some of the other details and concentrated more on her feelings with her dad...but that said, it has a good message or couple of messages...everyone grieves differently and yet, sometimes we have to go beyond our own feelings to help another, especially a child. And never give up trying to mend hurt and pain. You could really feel the pain of both the dad and the child and I am so happy it ended with forgiveness and understanding! Enjoyed the read.
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