The Official Writing Challenge
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Very descriptive and absorbing story, with a grate twist at the end.
What a delightful storyteller Grandpa is. I felt like one of the little ones huddled around his knees. The idea of a story within a story really works here. My only red ink is that five-year-old namesake needs hyphens because you brought three words into one modifier. I sincerely urge you to turn this into a short story for a magazine or an early reader book.(The storyline may be a bit too intense for a picture book, but I can see many possibilities for publishing.) I think with some illustrations, not only would the book be a Thanksgiving favorite, but an everyday favorite too.
I can't imagine being trapped in a well for a whole day, but I'm glad the story had a happy ending. Your story is a good reminder to be joyful in all circumstances.
What a sweet story and told so well that I felt I was there.

I hope the judges take note!

Precious story!

God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 14th overall! Happy Dance!