The Official Writing Challenge
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01/29/15
Excellent! Well done and well written.

God bless~
01/29/15
In light of your whole story, I appreciated your irony here. "not even High Priests could display any suggestion of household gods" And yes, they certainly did have some problems. Your tone is great in this!
01/30/15
Excellent!

You added so much detail in the re-telling of the story, and with the imagined conversations brought the whole scene to life without compromising the scriptural truth.

A great way to spread the message.

You should become a preacher:)
02/01/15
A wonderfully done retelling—and sadly today “religious” leaders still pollute with greed. Outstanding job on this!
Fascinating back story and very well told. The only spot of red ink would be early on, Josephus was called Joseph once. This threw me a little until I realised Josephus was correct. Beautifully told and highly imaginative.
Congratulations on ranking 15th overall! Happy Dance!
02/11/15
This is great work! Wow what an intriguing and telling approach to the topic!!!!! I love your style, its easy and gripping:) I felt like I was in the middle of a larger story and wanted to see it unfold!!! Great job!