The Official Writing Challenge
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11/29/14
Heartbreaking and inspiring at the same time. It was well paced. A perfect fit for the topic. Loved it.
11/30/14
Great story - it really drew me in. The pacing of the story was good with a satisfying conclusion to the dilemma. Grandpa's unsettling forgetfulness helped to heighten the suspense.
12/02/14
Believable dialogue, excellent descriptions. I was worried for Grandpa and Jake, and the suspense was gripping, considering all the possible ways the story could go. Well done.
12/03/14
Riveting and gripping piece that held my attention throughout. Well done!
God bless~