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This is a comical story on a serious subject. I thoroughly enjoyed your subtle humor. I had a real sense of both characters. I thought the MC was a female and dating Steve and when I found out he was a guy, I had to go back and reread it which interupted the flow. Other than that though, I think you did a great job of infusing the topic throughout the story. Your beginning drew me in and your dialog set the pace and atmosphere of the story. Nice job.
05/18/14
Interesting...I thought the same as Shan - that the MC was female and I, too, went back and re-read the opening bits to see if I had missed something before I could finally move on to the end. This lessened the impact of the comical ending.

Other than that, the writing was superb and the characters were vibrant with excellent dialogue.
05/19/14
Wow...great story, strong delivery, content powerful and message strong.

Well done.

God bless~
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