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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Digital Detox (04/24/14)

TITLE: A Loss for Words
By George Parler
04/28/14


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We had been married over thirty years. We had reached a point where we no longer communicated: at least not as we did in our younger years. Our interests had gradually navigated into different areas at that junction of our lives. I remember the past - We would sit and discuss our day. The good stuff and the not so good. Our triumphs and our failures. Our goals and hopes. Our dreams.

Pillow talk had been replaced by the rapid onslaught of snoring when we lay our heads down. Mornings were quiet, as the need for caffeine far outweighed the space for dialogue, but enough was enough. I had to do something.

I would make the first move to return to the use of verbalized thoughts: where facial expression and body posture were as much part of meaningful communication as the English syntax, if not more so.

But how would I reach her? We rarely frequented the same places anymore, but I had to try.

I thought about it long and hard. What words would I use? Should I spill my heart, with a river of words from the open gates of the reservoir of my soul, or would less be more in this situation?

I went to the last place I saw her and finally worked up the courage to type these words, “Whatcha doin’?” With a trembling hand, I clicked “Post.”

My heart leaped for joy as within seconds she responded… looking up from behind her laptop screen at me sitting across the living room at my laptop and said, “Idiot.”


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Lisa Johnson 05/01/14
This a really cute, sweet story... I can see it as I read it... she'll probably throw a couch cushion at him next...lol!
Joanne Sher 05/02/14
This is SO you. Loved it - fun and such a great twist/surprise ending. Delightful to enter the same week as you - who KNOWS how long it has been since THAT happened! :)
Joe Moreland05/02/14
Hah! Perfect! I love it. Now this is real! :)

I hate to comment and contribute to you falling off the wagon, George (read his brick post on the forums if you don't get that comment), but your delightfully funny story forced my hand with a single word: "Idiot".

However, I cannot help you with your addiction to red ink...I simply don't have any for you. Sorry.
Marty Wellington 05/02/14
Loved it - so subtle. Great piece!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/03/14
You always make me smile--Love your last line!
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/04/14
Hahaha! This was really a cute read.

God bless~
Linda Buskirk05/06/14
Very cute. I wanted to read more.
Maura J. Merrigan05/07/14
So cute, great write! Very funny,clever, twist at end!
Graham Insley 05/07/14
Brilliant.

As red ink, I thought I would like to see a stronger start with a bigger hook. but I was wrong and applied the red ink to self. The rhythm of the whole thing was perfect.

Blessings, Graham.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/08/14
Congratulations on EC. I always knew you were a winner!
Tracy Nunes 05/09/14
The brevity of this was perfect as you wove one thought into a very meaningful but humorous narrative. I enjoyed it a lot.