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Topic: Digital Detox (04/24/14)
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TITLE: An Ode To Technology (Or Not...) | Previous Challenge Entry
By Joanne Sher
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
for thirty years or more.
I loved me my Atari games
and cable channels (four).
I got my first computer
in 1987.
An IBM 286:
my DOS-run PC heaven.
I didn't get a cell phone
til 1999,
and though it weighed 900 pounds,
it suited me just fine.
Back in the last millennium,
technology was fun.
A nice and quick diversion
for when the day was done.
But these days electronics
are more than just a break.
They link us to the outside world
each moment we're awake.
We get our news and share our thoughts
from Main Street to Bombay.
Our memos travel fast as light:
we cannot get away.
So every week or so these days,
I turn off my PC.
No smart phone, tablet, or Ipod:
I make my day tech-free.
Instead, I write in longhand,
and read a paper book.
I take a walk, play with my kids,
clean dirt in every nook.
It's something I look forward to:
my digital time out.
It helps my brain to take a break;
my eyes to not pop out.
I come back feeling more refreshed.
It almost never fails -
despite the fact I may return
to ninety-eight emails.
Don't get me wrong, I've no desire
to toss my screens away.
But tech fasts here, a screen break there,
has kept my hair less gray.
Though desert islands have appeal -
the peace could be perfection -
I doubt I'd last three days or more
with no wi-fi connection!
(this is MOSTLY nonfiction - with a bit of license)
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This poem was wonderfully simplistically complicated.
It is so hard with poetry to give valid critiques and I am not qualified to do so. However, I stumbled a few times with syllable count; rhythm. Of course, that could just be me and mixtures of rhythm sometimes do throw me off.
The flow and rhyme made it an enjoyable read with a great message.
Blessings.
Great job
God bless~
:-)
for all the truth within...
Technology still baffles me!
Congratulations, Friend!
and
I'm going to try the fast from technology per your creatively crafted advise.
This category fit you perfectly. The poem flowed easily over my tongue, with humor and seriousness coming through loud and strong. Well done!
Continued Blessings upon you, your family and ministry....
Wing His Words
Anyway... I love this poem! It's funny, true, and an important reminder to turn off your gadgets now and then to spend some time in the real world. Flowed perfectly. No complaints!