The Official Writing Challenge
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04/25/14
Beautiful job.

God bless~
04/26/14
"Wanting more, but getting so much less."

Great job with this. Way to show that Christians can care about the environment too. So many environmentalists seem to think that a desire for a clean and safe Earth precludes belief in God. They forget who made everything so perfectly in the first place. You beautiful poem reminds me how the sin brought into the world has tainted everything.

Really liked the line, "wanting more but getting so much less"

Also liked the title--very appropriate.

My bit of red ink--when I read poems with little punctuation I constantly find myself adding it in and that ruins the flow of the poem. Maybe that is more of my problem than the author's!
04/30/14
Great writing! This is truly hard-hitting and puts greed right up there as the main culprit of the world's many problems. Well done!
05/01/14
Just wanted to agree with Laura's comment re punctuation, as you have requested red ink. I like punctuation in poetry too. Nonetheless, you've done a great job.