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This is a fascinating story. I loved how the initial conflict drew me in immediately. Then the second and third conflict just added to the suspense. I would guess some might have trouble with the word spell, but I saw it more as a prayer. I liked how you showed the one character praying. Many people don't really know how to pray so I always enjoy a prayer in a story. You definitely touched on the topic. Just when things felt hopeless, there was the light at the end of the tunnel. Nice job.
02/04/14
Great descriptions - and you've got me wondering about the setting and time of this piece, and the healers and spells and such. Would love to see more!

Thanks for sharing.
02/05/14
Great story with impact and content. Powerful ending.

Nicely done!

God bless~
02/05/14
Like a scene from a sci-fi drama! Captivating read!
Congratulations on ranking 19 overall!
02/08/14
I loved This